Arm's Length.

I kept you close, closer than most would ever know
We've grown and shown we were harder than stone
Cant be broken..
Bones, out of the garmet's home
Nothing to hide..
Abided by the higher tide, We rode..
To shore above waves so sure we would see no troubles..
Now its seems that when we breathe all we see is bubbles.
Undercover tones are subtle & double in hidden terms
Words are submerged under the rubble..
Forbidden worms..
That dig under the cover of other's who kid..
In turn..
Bridges are burned with no concern for the past
Leaving flash in the pan friends turned to ash..
No laughs..
Or the need to ask whether first or last..
It doesnt matter
Because there's nothing worse than irrelevent chit chatter
Venomous spit splatters...
Then desinigrates to thin air
So worthless is the purpose when your exsitence sits there
And fair, is just an opinion..
So any ass with a hole can speak
Just know, if shit's what your dishing..
Everyone's nose will smell how you reak.
Only the weak judge and hold a grudge..
Cause God loves the meek
Seek and ye shall find a shallow mind won't survive the deep
You reap what you sew..
So i've stiched a suit of armor
So don't bother with you sharp tounge..
I wont let you harm her
Gone are..
The days of friendly phrases and salutaitons
All thats left are the ways in which you've strayed thru hating
Stayed debating.. the start, the end, the wrongs & the rights
When all along .. your reflection didnt belong in the light
Sing your songs of might... And i'll be strong thru silence
A sight for sore eyes, The truth hurts your eyelids
Like ultra violet.. rays.. I'll stay warm with Karmas strength
Once had a tight grip...... but now your at Arm's Length.

Fake friends always bend in the end..
All thats left is for them to brake away.. go ahed.. brake far far away.

Evolve You Know You AllWays Do Your Thing Holmez, Damn This Was A Dope Peice, It Stayed Constant Through Out, Flow Was On Point, Vocab Was Tight,

It doesnt matter
Because there's nothing worse than irrelevent chit chatter
Venomous spit splatters...
...Dunno Why, There Was Better Lines In That Peice Than This But For Some Reason I Was Jus Feeling It Bruv,
.........

that was hot i liked it a lot
good poetry

Appreciated

Come on

nice writting

Wow.. Great feedback ^^

^i know right.

anyway, why is this being slept on?

kids dont get the concept.. they read a few lines, then say "its whack" when really.. they have no idea. or will just tell u its dope cuz of ur post count' LOL. but on my side, i think this was outstanding, i loved it man.. metaphors were definatly the key here.. multies were nice, rhyme scheme u choose made it cool. definatly looking forward to seeing u drop more in the future, we need more kids like you in this forum.. those who dig deep for the concepts, take this peice for example: "Venomous spit splatters...
Then desinigrates to thin air
So worthless is the purpose when your exsitence sits there"

was nice.. liked it alot..

keep it up man.

Thank you for real feeback. Much appreciated.

feedback

dope piece realy. dont see what critical feed i cud give coz its str8 nice. poetic rythym n rap flow combined . imagery was there. rhyming was tite..concept was truth to the bone. easy to follow. emotion was there f'sho........ wasnt the prettiest of verses to look at from a cosmetic point of view. but that doesnt matter an inch coz shit was str8 smooth poetics
keep em poppin dun

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that shit is dope man i thought it was

Thanks... Appreciated

To shore above waves so sure we would see no troubles..
Now its seems that when we breathe all we see is bubbles.
Undercover tones are subtle & double in hidden terms
Words are submerged under the rubble..
Forbidden worms..

^Liked this part.

Flow was awkward as first until I got used to your structure. This was a pretty good piece although I thought that some of your lines were a bit underdeveloped and/or immature. For example, spit splatter/Everyone's nose will smell how you reak..I didn't quite understand the relevance of those two lines, but besides that I really liked reading this. These lines overshadowed the minor flaws though:

In turn..
Bridges are burned with no concern for the past
Leaving flash in the pan friends turned to ash..
No laughs..
Or the need to ask whether first or last..

^Simple, yet they had meaning. Good shit. Check out my joint in my sig.

Im sure I replied to this at RnR, but anyways - its good to see you're still at it Rich. I liked the concept a lot in this, you tied up kind of... all the 'loose ends' towards the end, nice to see you toying with a couple of diffferent schemes too. It shows you've got a whole other understanding of the technical side to topical verses, as opposed to just writing the verse out. I like that about you, there's very few kids here who've grasped that fully yet. Anyways, like I think I said already at RnR, nice drop. Stick around here more, bi-otch!
Haha,

Peace!