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feel me...
Estranged we are.. but fa real it werent essential,,,
Lettin u go was hard.. but dat decision was mental,,,
U made dis bitch so happy, u made dis bitch laugh,,,
U provided and gave dis bitch.. everything u had,,,
But still i was blinded, 2 myself i never reminded,,,
U could never be compared 2... or combined wit,,,
I apoligize for all tha shiit i put u thru, i was mistaken,,,
Finally i’m awaken, my hart unlocked & my head is shaken,,,
I realize dat my feelin’s were cold, yeah i relinquish,,,
But on a real doe baby bway i don’t want us 2 finish,,,
I was reluctant when i said “lets go our separate ways”,,,
We argued & moaned so much, we had our separate says,,,
Led 2 no enjoyment, ‘cep 4 more heart destroyment,,,
& non of us had da decency 2 stop & think for a moment,,,
Problems will never leave us, cah wen u sinnin it costs,,,
U always loze wha u love most, & it was “U” i lost,,,
jus lettin out some feelins.. he knows who he is... 1 lurv...
feed appriciated...
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First off, the very beggining got to me... why u calling yaself a bitch? gotta giv yaself more respect then that, if you can write something like this letting you know how you feel and what was buggin ya, then u gotta realise that you don't have a 'bitch' status. I duno what ya'll been thru, but was very deep n heart setting. Flow was real precise here, a lil off a tad but no biggie, and the way you structured this with the wordplay n rhyme vocab was real good. Played topic, but you made it your own thru different metaphors n expressions, did a real nice job. Oh, n thanks again for ya feed on my piece :P
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thanx fo da feed aiite.. its all appriciated...^^^ ent no harm done wen i wrote down bitch.. its kool... lol... stil thanx again hun....1
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kick that fuckin flo..........damn....put a beat with that.. and its done.......nice work,,,,,,
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it sounds better on audio.. i've tried it still.. but yo its only a lil thing.. nah mean..
thanx spade........ uppin...
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yeah i thought nthis was nice as a song.. kinda reminded of tupac when he gets sort of gangsta and sentimental at the same time.. yo yeah was nice.. sure would make a nice audio song fosho
was worded pretty good i reckon..
yeah coo keepin it 1
pz
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thanx fo feed vortex ^^^ i'm workin on my vocab but i gotta say in dis piece its kinda improvin 2 tha last i wrote....
uppin....... more feed plzzzzzz.....
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felt the emotion didn't have Imagary really.....structure was straight just don't like all them dots at the end of ur lines.........this was okay just read elavated Om's take ppl's advice N'' elavate.
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it werent meant 2 have imagery on a real dow.. lol
but yep i'm elavatin & this werent a worked on piece ya get me...
stil its kool jay.. thanx...
uppin dis byatch...
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na I'm just giving you advice cause I need to elavate too N'' I'm just tellin u wat I do so u can maybe do it N'' elavate.
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aiiite i get cha... its kool... thanx aiite...
uppz.....
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yo
ye i dont think there is ne1 on RB that hasnt felt that piece..i sure did
ye well you sure ad a good flo nd rythm
luvin it
keep em coming :D
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thanx chrome .. next time do give better feed aiite its tha rules or u'll get banned from .om aiite...
uppin.....
