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Apathy for the Devil
Tossed from the heavens, now residing in hell
Satan stares, gaping hole from whence he fell
Expel the ideas of mortality and consequence
No matter how hard you try to fight against
A modern view of hell will red flag false pretense
Apathy kills, leaving destruction in its wake
Fake abolitionist’s souls, the devil will take
Screams of those who contemplate innocence
Blood pours as soulless corpses hang in suspense
Hellish creatures with smiles of sharp daggers
The apathetic populace foundation staggers
Dangerous tales of deception are spread
The Lord gave comfort when he broke bread
Images of true horror imbed the mind instead
No escape for the indifferent from the wrath of evil
Theories of the afterlife shattered in upheaval
Retrieval of retribution will amount to suffering
No rougher thing to recognize than your own demise
A tougher sting like toxic thoughts you comprise
Return to torment inside the flames of contusion
Trapped in the procession to and ultimate conclusion
A voice asks why you didn’t believe, was it confusion
In the misery of seclusion this voice is your own
With an unknown future and true hell of being alone
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=224331
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=223614
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I worked hard on this shit someone please tell me what you think
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wow... i dont see how you havent got any feed back on this...
this was a very deep drop... with a bangin flow and good vocab...
The structure could use some work but over all it was decent and flowed together well....
Nice topic
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stay up and keep elevatin... ill be waiting to see more of your OMs...
nice drop homie...
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Nice Drop. Neva Seen This Topic Before Either. Nice Flow And Evrything. The Structure Could Be Fixed A Bit, But Other Than That It's A Perfect Piece.
Stay Up And Keep Droppin Da Hotness
*holla*
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dope piece....i liked tha imagery...good emotion...your wordplay and vocab were on point..not to extreme..it fit this piece perfectly....flowed very nicley...ive seen a similiar topic but this was tight never the less...structure was tight....all in all this peice was very tight....check out tha link in my sig titled concrete roses..or the beast above...id appreciate it.~1~
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Very nice work
vocabulary was deffinitly on point as it wasnt made to hard to understand
your flow was also very good
tha recognize your own demise was very good
great drop
rtf?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=224903
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nice vocab i was really feeling this drop you did very good and you coulda did better than that but i liked the whole thing thru it al... nice topic...
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Very dope drop, i liked the vocabulary you used on this, the first 4 lines sucked me in. Good metaphors, and flow, and the structure was fine. This could be a dope audio verse if you had a mic and legthened it a bit, or collabed with someone.
I was really feeling this, keep dropping in OM.
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I can definatly tell that you listen to Jedi Mind Tricks with drops like this.
Obviously I gotta mension the Vocabulary - You have shown ALOT of intelligence.
''No rougher thing to recognize than your own demise
A tougher sting like toxic thoughts you comprise
Return to torment inside the flames of contusion
Trapped in the procession to and ultimate conclusion
A voice asks why you didn’t believe, was it confusion''
DAMN! If you could make this into audio (and flowing)... that would be EXTRA special.
The imagery was dark, and thats cool cuz I think that's what you intended.
Structure was clean, meaning the flow was clean, except sometimes there was alot of big words crammed in, which ?kinda slowed it down? but that could be down to me not being able to pronounciate all the words l0l.
ON THE WHOLE, I was feeling this piece & the time you spent showed through.
Good drop.
1luv.
PS --- Give me some feed in my ''Drunk'' thread.
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I was really feelin this piece bro. Liked the wrdplay and all the rhymes and multi was tight.
flow was on point, my favourite lines were first 4, they really drew me too thi piece.
nice wrk, keep droppin
pece :D
