Nights in the Summertime

I love the summer, warm weather, still rockin', all leather
Black bag, black beretta, all night cheddar
Shorty's cluckin' on the block, talkin' bout who's clothes is better
While the thugs on the block talkin' bout whose pussy wetter
Spanish fly in the air, mad shorties everywhere
Smokin' blunts in the stairs, run my fingers through her hair
Gas 'em up, give 'em backstage passes to X.L.
Wit my bitch, end of the night, we hit the hotel
Oh well, summertime bring out the dog in the God
I see that thong through the spandex, and my dick get hard
Got a get a little piece of that boo, you know how we do
I love it when you wearin' see-through, cuz I can see through
Pick up a bag of lethal on the Ave.
Meet Vafinest in the town, let him take a few drags
Chain on the Nextel, pollyin' wit Bagz
Smokin on a blunt, listen to a bitch nag

uppin

hey dis is very good
I liked the sceme

Hey can u check out my open mic rite under yours?
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this was really good you had a good verse going but I think you could have made it more longer and put more emotion and imagination in it and twist it up a lil bit.But overall this was good from you man I liked readin it keep up the good work

uppin

Your sig is waaaay to fucking long.

yo that was good i like that you flo was on point

uppin

nigga that was ok, i saw sum nice multis in there, that more of a hit type song than a deep one, personally i like deep ones better but wut u did there was pretty nice... 1 think i woulda liked 2 c a bit better is 4 u 2 go in depth more, make it longer, explain things stronger and more... that was jus a quik keystile nigga, if u check all my OMs they was all super long and i got everythin off my chest, thats wut OMs r, jus gettin everythin off ur chest, out in2 tha open... all in all a pretty decent drop tho, multis were nice, topic was aight... 1 more thing u might wanna try out is, i noticed u were bouncin ideas around alot... try and focus more on the main topic... otherwise that was a coo drop... keep it up homie

ok.,....this was good and the topic was good too, interesting and kool, this was enjoyabe to read, rhymes were good, flow was ok, same with strucutre, just work on making each line a bit more even, overall this was good, good job and keep it up and keep droppin

why yall lyin to that kid???this piece was "dope"..or "fya"..or "tight" or "cool"..this piece was elementary at best...you have no real topic..so no consistency..unless you count ramblings....your wordplay and vocab are used and just elementary...your rhyme scheme was average....you had no complexity or creativity..and dont rap about hit unless everything is tru...or everything is fiction...either way...you need toelevate..keep elevatin.~1`

uppin

title dont apply, but this was below decent, too basic, but flowed knda nice

uppin

^ shorten your fuckin sig.