"Two faced"

Two faced

Inner struggles to find a clue, one masked identity
One person, one mind, two sides of this sanity
Life has landed me, a dilemma of my description
Health officials have not one prescribed prescription
This a simple case of one life's born addiction...
Or a forlorning of God's last and final prediction

Two eyes, two hands, two legs, and one face
Hidden face beneath race, linked and laced
Time and space, other cases of my disgrace?
Make haste to find answers, satisfy mind's taste
But is it a waste, if life's obscurities stay true...
And I base life, on being two, like me and you

Two ways, two angles, one direction of the flow
Choose which way to go, but mind's at cross roads
Interweiving and mixing of this and that ideas
Lead us, or just me, one person, you can't see us
Red and green lights, but I'm stuck at caution...
A blockage of two sides, but couldn't help flossin'

Two days, two years, two tears, and one life
Depression sets in and one must live this strife
One person, one mind, imperfection of one line
Two sides, two basic numbers, should be fine?
Line- one's anxious feelings can't ever surpass
Truth be told... or is it a dream and not a fact

Linked:

Chrit - Prom Night Problems
Miss_Jess- Infatuated by love

..and some others....
I'm still reading others as well

uppin

feedback plz....

Great piece, loved the way you used tha numbers (like this one: Two days, two years, two tears, and one life ) Not an easy piece to capture (my opinion, but might be caused by my lacking English :) lol) But as i read it few times, i got what you were sayin', felt your emotion. Flow, vocab, structure,...they all worked for me!

Very nice....

Jess -xxx-

thanks alot, glad u enjoyed.
more?

damn, never been slept on this bad....

leave a link, and I WILL read your work, all these views and no feedback.

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I actually liked this piece.
Seriously, something about the flow that got me hooked.
Interesting to say the least. I liked the first 6 lines the best.
Its always good to have a good start to the piece to get the readers interested.
Keep it up!
Check out my, 'Diamonds Are Forever.' piece, in my sig, thanks.
Peace.

thanks freeman.
up again.

nice and i thought you were just a text battler.. lol
nice imagrey here.. i reall yliked this the flow was real good..
and it kept me reading.. not a lot of pieces draw my attention
like yours did.. multis wer nice.. and the vocab was good
and i think this was a real great piece

real deep piece dawg...felt it took me two times to fully comprehend...
good vocab...really feelin da concept of twosides to things...
shoulda made it longer thought..and u right this shouldnt be slept on so bad..
hit my OM up called Illtheories
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...83#post1449883

up.

I'm new to RB so you can take what I say with a grain of salt, but I like what I read. Good flow, you really carry the reader from cynical to sombre. Starts off a little stronger than finish though.

One Luv

love the feedback, but I'm not getting much!
I accept any and all....

thanks cali. up again.