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No h8,dr,crew vote
10-15lines
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G'luck NI99A
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Rules .............
No h8,dr,crew vote
10-15lines
drop b4 tuesday 11:59pm GMT
u spit 1st
check in 1st!
G'luck NI99A
im not posting until weve both checked in i dont want none of you pre writing shit
ok ok ok no,feedin,no bitin,no recyclin,no pre-writin
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...................checkin in ill post in 30 mins
after me post ur verse dont log off
.................................................. .................................................. ..........................what are DR votes
dickride=d/r where u get ppl 2 vote 4 u and shit like that.....wens this battle going down???i wana c if dat homo bitch has elevated
here me verse.
dis homos head is small enough to fit up his anus
sorry brainless rappin will neva make you famous
im heinous, bitch i cant make my words painless
your just a lame prick,who couldnt spit sick
if herpes an diptheria were genetic
aint hard to curse you,even ur crew wanna hurt u
66.6 percent of da time he gets murked too (hommels record 3w-6L work it out)
an get stept on like a shit in the dirt do
hes thinking so hard its making him purple
pre writting da verse shitting himself like a gerbil
they might sound good in ur head, but they dont as verbals
when i finish chewing u up,spit u out like a furball
Checkity Checkity check in ............
well dun bitch make a fool of urself idnt hav a crew,
Congratulations now im gona make afool of u,and gona do it quick A.K.A murk u!/
Code-187 the only code u'll be needin is 999,
Phone up the police say"Dizzys out he causin a crime!"/
Wats up bitch after that last line u've gon abit quiet,u cud hear a pin drop,
Udidnt no wat Dick ridin was, u were used 2 usin dick hop!/ *1
Now im nearly puttin an end 2dis siik flow,
As soon as its posted Code-187 will be cryin get Dizzy hommel on death row./
It wont be fair him wantin 2 shoot me down,
My blood splatterd on d floor,he sed 2the gunman this will even the score,he stole my rap crown!/
Now thats unfair u left a huge scar on my head,
U shot me bitch but im still not dead!/
O damn im bak in jail and there goes the bell,
Time is up son im return 2my Cell its 7ftwide its Smaller than Hell!/
Explanation:*1 he dint no wat D/R ment he wa used 2 Dik Hop.
Same thing different werds!
Soz Code-187 iwent 2lines over.
it dnt matter though hu cares about d line limit!
Uppin 4 Votes!
G'Luck Code!
Yo Yo Yo Uppin dis battle 4sum votes!............................................ ...................
up up up up up up uppin 2 ...
aiight ok battle by both
hey yo heres my break down
wordplay- code 187
punchlines- code 187 hot shit (aint hard to curse you,even ur crew wanna hurt u
66.6 percent of da time he gets murked too )
impact of disses- code 187
overall vote- code 197
Until you vote correctly... your votes will be taken away.
-Axe
okay dizzy you just plain have no skillz
i mean your closer was horrible, fuckin sad man, you need to elevate n leave battln alone 4 a while
code 187 had consistent shit, as well as constant flow, both had good personals, but dissy had bad structure
opener- tie
structure- 187
punches- dizzy
flow- 187
personals- tie
closer- 187
vote- 187 A VERY WEAK ASS BATTLE !
hit my battles up, links r in my sig, post an honest vote!
dis homos head is small enough to fit up his anus
sorry brainless rappin will neva make you famous
sort of a weak opening.. I see the punch/meta you were going for, concept is alright..
im heinous, bitch i cant make my words painless
your just a lame prick,who couldnt spit sick
follow through punch ios sort of weak, kinda played.. set up isnt much
if herpes an diptheria were genetic
aint hard to curse you,even ur crew wanna hurt u
set was an alright connect.. the meta is alright with it but like i said sort of a played subject. follow through could be improved
66.6 percent of da time he gets murked too (hommels record 3w-6L work it out)
an get stept on like a shit in the dirt do
meta is alright here... nothing specil or to hard though. i thought you were going some were with the percent part ( more than you did) but still a good personal
hes thinking so hard its making him purple
pre writting da verse shitting himself like a gerbil
set is nice, follow through could have used a little more
they might sound good in ur head, but they dont as verbals
when i finish chewing u up,spit u out like a furball
{b] straight punch.the follow through wasnt much, but it was an alright meta[/b]
over all you verse had some direction, couild have used a little more. your punchs weren the hardest but you got um in there mix with your metas. Multis would have helped, your flow was basic ( vocab would improve that) over all your verse was decent.
well dun bitch make a fool of urself idnt hav a crew,
Congratulations now im gona make afool of u,and gona do it quick A.K.A murk u!/
follow through seems like your trying to make some thing its not. set was alright but feeding isnt my thing
Code-187 the only code u'll be needin is 999,
Phone up the police say"Dizzys out he causin a crime!"/
basic... seemed more like a filler here. You could have sliped the 999 part and made it work with 911 if you tryed a little harder
Wats up bitch after that last line u've gon abit quiet,u cud hear a pin drop,
Udidnt no wat Dick ridin was, u were used 2 usin dick hop!/ *1
follow through was weak, but with a little better wording you would have made it alot better
Now im nearly puttin an end 2dis siik flow,
As soon as its posted Code-187 will be cryin get Dizzy hommel on death row./
filler type.. tryed maken it a personal, i think.. not much came out of this bar
It wont be fair him wantin 2 shoot me down,
My blood splatterd on d floor,he sed 2the gunman this will even the score,he stole my rap crown!/
if you dont pick up on the next bar thats going to work against you
Now thats unfair u left a huge scar on my head,
U shot me bitch but im still not dead!/
starting to lose strength in your punchs, flow is coming off and on, no real metas here.. the follow through isnt much
O damn im bak in jail and there goes the bell,
Time is up son im return 2my Cell its 7ftwide its Smaller than Hell!/
[/b] not that god of an ending.. no real punch, lacking on your meta[/b]
over all your verse needed work, work on your punchs make them a little more direct. try adding in some better metaphors with a rhyme scheme that flows well with some multis.
vote- code 187
came with harder punchs and metaphors. his flow was basic but it hit enough to win him this battle.