Lost Souls...Back Again [[!!TRYOUT!!]]

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Originally Posted by J Merk

do u have the picture u want

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still lookin, i got a pic that i like, but he dont have the yellow diamonds in his ears.........so im still lookin, unless thats cool, and yoyu can put them in.....

i got it, but it got some other people on it...........
http://www.palmrock.com/Photos/TheDi...0303_00089.jpg

u just want me to cut camron out

yeah, and see if you can make him bigger, with yellow diamonds that really shine.....

J Merk Did Ya Get My Request Fo The Sig

Peace out fam be bak on later hopefully

yo its me tha female baby-smile'z u guyz wanted to check out some of my raps well this is kinda like it enjoy tell me wat ya'll think... Different Way

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IP: 94A5 9184


Im gon live im gon survive im gon love my life im gon tripp ova time every 24/7, even when im striving and crying sometimes it hurts when im driving thinking bout' my baby how he loved me and made me fill so crazy, im down for a g not a hommie u see all pop his ass if he kisses another hoe leave him on tha streets then all let him know i love him just dont do this again but he still puts pain in my heart like whoa it hurts but we can make it hurt, he puts the ''o'' back in L.O.V.E i see just touch me there and watch me scream, im like certain woman i like it tha raw way like when my man go up and down moving his tonuge round and round put it back in motion make it work like were in tha ocean, Make me scream make me scream i like how u do it yeah i like how ya do it oh dont stop, when tha rain comes down it makes me frown u turn that smile a different way but then i laughed and u turned away you said gurl wont u come over here and play all teach u something new in a different way wont u come my way and all teach u how i play all make u say my name no lie just do it my way believe me it will turn out great....

i got it seks

Family of mine, how are yall?

yo crew......whats good in hurr

nothin much chillin chillin

yo,............

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Originally Posted by .:Shellz:.

yo i like ya whole concept of ya verse....but there were some down sides to it

Structure-......it was kinda off...i kno ur probly not use to righting lines bar for bar..but its way easier to read that way..plus it doesnt look like u think at all when writting it

Flow-the structure helps the person kind of hear how it would sound when spoken .... and ur was off

Vocab- u kinda had the nursery rhyme thing goin on

punches- there were none...u should throw in sum similies and metaphores to make ya lines spark

elevation is needed...its the same wit ya battles

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its a no but u can try again when u get better

yo merk.....how many peeps u gotta make sigs for?

that was for u Baby-Smile'z

i got 3 to do lust