Whats up J-Doe? How u livin?
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Whats up J-Doe? How u livin?
yo crew im out.. goin to watch the HipHop Honor Awards. 1
ayo who am i supposed to do sigs for if u want to do it pm the requst to me so i wont forget
i got soo many to do yo......what u want on it again...lol?Quote:
Originally Posted by point_blank
come on gimmie some feedbck on wat i did
Iam koo Klept...just tryna get sum battles closed and shit...u know how that is...What happend to Renegade?
yeah i got two battles open that I can barely get any votes on....u askin me about renegade?....if so...nothin
Baby-SMile'z u have any battles open we could check out?
yo i like ya whole concept of ya verse....but there were some down sides to itQuote:
Originally Posted by Baby-Smile'z
Structure-......it was kinda off...i kno ur probly not use to righting lines bar for bar..but its way easier to read that way..plus it doesnt look like u think at all when writting it
Flow-the structure helps the person kind of hear how it would sound when spoken .... and ur was off
Vocab- u kinda had the nursery rhyme thing goin on
punches- there were none...u should throw in sum similies and metaphores to make ya lines spark
elevation is needed...its the same wit ya battles
i second that i looked at all of ya batles u need some work still
so its a no but u can come try again later
yeh some jus elevate a lil....or as much as possible and come bac on through
yo can some one bump my battle?
i got u shellz
good lookin Merk...
done deal