Inactive...

and LMAO thats that kids 3446 time getting banned, he isnt coming back to here.

just PM a mod and tell them u want ur old name and this one to combine..PM illunitic..i thik thats his name...thats who i asked t do it fo me.....

and again.........ur right.....no

I actually liked your piece but not enough to say "Yep your in maaaaaaaaaaaan"

Do another piece with effort, and some sort of story, not meta b/s.

G/l bizatch!

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Originally Posted by Bounce

Red are areas in which your word choice could have been thought out better. Diction was lacking due to this. Very fractured in parts, the first line has mistakes in it. Plural use of singular terms, words added that should not be there and such. Most of the red could have been reworded to make this read, flow and land better.

Green are areas in which your development and concepts could have used greater attention. The suggestions I left, are just equivelent to the concepts you went with in the drop, but on a higher level more influencial. They would impact the reader more, and are overall just are on a higher intellectual level. Your were way to blan and basic here, nothing spectacular, nothing complicated. Poeple leaving replies on your OM, with comments like spectacular and amazing, are just ignorant to writting for effect in general, they will only hold you back...

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Very good advise, and spectacular breakdown, is all I can say. :thumbup:

nice sig

if im not lazy ill do some sigs tdoay but ummmmm ne1 play cs

cs what that....and what bout my sig....

Cs?

kareless, can i PM u my text ?

Shut Up^

Faggot :shoot:

Slut and o.v dose should partner up.

updates............
double oh has 3 votes ///my vote he's in
bam bam shall be up'd to soldier for his 5 wins
whysguy is added tot he crew as a soldier

Go for it. .

I'll Pm you later though.

Munky what the hell is CS?!??!!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!??!?!

counter strike

Vs Hit N Run

2 text

Cannabarz
Slut

2 Topical

Illusion
Deviate



1 Audio

Justin Time

Word, I called em out. :)

i've play'd it before...but i dont have it personally......

Yep...

Word.

we gun kill em ! :shoot:

Whats good yall..


Wonderin If I could get alittle tryout...

I'll battle whoever...


But for now here's alittle open mic ish..



A Hoody and an Evil Grin as I Linger in The Nights Shade
WIth a Mind That's Adopted from A Rusty Knife Blade
The sight of Life Fades like Pre-Mature Abortion
Walk to The Rythm of Repettitive Low Notes On The Devil's Organ
Supportin any and all Form's of Generall Animosity
A Cup Full of Blood and Muffin made of Poppey Seed
No Shade of Red is Stoppin Me Not a Wall That's Unscalable
Heartbeat's in Morse Code which translates to Unavailable
Invading Soul's to Maintain the Hope
But it's hard when I must Presuade and Serenade Control
Coal Hot Flash's Of Dad's Belt and Screaming Female's
Blood Spattered Wall's, The Smell Of Death... Every Detail
Gag Reflex trying to Pre-vial, Though the Taste is rather Savorey
But Burst's Uncontrollably from the Thought of Jesus Saving Me
These Voice's Pleague My Dream's, Yet so soothing to the Ear
Bring Me To Tears, Yet Able To Talk Me off this Pier
Forever Hate Whoever for Shitting Me Out on This God Foresaken Sphere
Introduce them to the Exit 1 by 1 Wether or not They Volunteer
At The Mercy Of a Vocal Spear, Lucifer's Piegon Messanger
He Show's Me The Vision of How It Should be Through a Lacerated Retina
Infected From lack Evidence On The Paper, The Voices That Said "Rape Her!"
Defective Thought Process Hence the Sense Malevolence Is 2nd Nature
"Crazed Killer on The Loose" Read The Paper
Smell of Fresh Burnt Flesh is So Arousing Inhale The Vapor
The Smell Gasoline Didn't Awake Her.. Not Even A Faint Stir
Greet Her at the Gates of Hades Where I'll Be Waiting Where The Lakes Burn
Where The Pure Show Disgust and The Angelic Combust
Finding Joy and Hurmor at the Sight as I stroke Cerberus

yo dvs am i still in tha crew

Nah

Elevate.

Peace

Ex

You got a dope rhyming scheme, work on multis structure and your perspective and youll be there.

for now, no

pz

????????????????????

why wouldnt you be

cuz sonic said i have to battle vallie and beat him to stay in

yo i didnt wanna but i wanted to stay in tha crew

lol and u lost............

ayo help me in my battle vs mctornado...i will return the favor...its in my sig..... all i need it 3 people to vote....

Word ex, that was hot.

HNR should be replying soon.

Ill keep y`all updated

Word.

Hows the name, im keeping it only for today :)

Lol.

:shoot:

hmmm... so whats up people... I take your advice should i come here or go
to DYNASTY?

lol youll do better here dawg trust me

im not a soldier

sorry drop that and drop me

yo guys im gonna need u to hit up on a battle for me soon be honest

ayo can yall help close da battle wit me and ~nrgetik i woulda al ready 1 but like a dumm ass i put only ppl wit 200 posts can vote so if u have 200 posts can u go and vote iight........

yo thanks ta'll guys..and the one whos voted i helped ya'll out! too..peace...o yea....do we have a truce or sum shit between me and ya'll??!?!?!? get back to me on this.....