bounce what flaws did you thing that i had in my verse
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bounce what flaws did you thing that i had in my verse
aite good.... iif u want any more tell me what u want n ill do em.... oh in fonts whats that graffiti style font
what fonts
Derek. If you're a topical head then I'd say yeah you were in.
If you wanna be a text head we stopped recruiting
ight man yall can check this out when i feel like yall good enough......
^^ werd yo am still down with apoth cuz smiley asked me and that shit got my head spinnin ?? !
you got my vote
how many votes i need to be crew.?^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
two
so when can i spit
now
vote on this battle right here people
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...66#post2374766
If ya name's still on the roster then yeah.
Ight Go Vote On Mines Too Pusha ...how Did U Make Ur Battle A Link ...
The writters voice was severly under developed, due to syntax and language issues, nothing major, just a matter of word choice. The basics were there such as concept, angle of approach and development of story and charecters. Nice take on it, but you really could have dropped a legendary verse with that sort of take on a topical, instead you did well enough to beat your opponent and catch my eye. I can see many area where you could have increased your peices assonance by tweaking the rhyme scheme. I also seen a lack of very strong metaphoric reference, which only adds the the impact a peice has, mainly when held to a maximum line limit. The way to break thru that is to say tons in a few short metas, it takes a hwile to really grasp this, most abuse it and overload. Then the voice becomes interupted and studdered. I have a meeting in a minute, so I'll get back ot you on this... I've worked with all the dope heads that came up recently, so trust that I can help you get over this hump...Quote:
Originally Posted by smileyfacedkilla
lyric ur an idiot I have not hate against you homie I think ya verse was hot and I'm sorry that you lost.....ok?
i want to try out, what should i do?
yo why are ya'll acting gay, get out of here with that gay posting about DR's and stuff d it someplace else.....
eh yo lil mama wanna try out fa ya'lls crew.
yo Pusha do i just spit some lines right here man......just quick key style?
proffesor, your like in 6 crews, wtf
no I'm in blade and this one that I made
yer spit sum lines
this crew over we don't accept tryouts sorry....close this mods
aighty ill spit some......yo killa whats up with your record? nevermind dogg ima gonna go to blade oracles.......
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ok whateva kali im not battlin u forget it im just gon change my IP and start a new accoun so theres nothin u can do cuz im still gon be here aight
and kali if u still want me to be in this crew afta i change my name and IP ill PM u if u want aight .......nahhh fuck it man u mite be a snitch and tell bounce so fuck it ill just try out again and if i cant come in then good luck to yall anyways so pz out every1 pz out for good fuck AL CAPONE im gon be some1 else bye bitches especially bounce
yea today im gonna go to tha meeting for my record deal for one year just to let tha crew know cuz we still homies rite? lol
Nah fuck that!!!
thats like your tryin to clear your tracks so you dont get dqed in insanes battle..
Leave this shit open untill the situation gets resolved
I said you can have it damn ok......and hey our crew is closed but they will never vote on a crew battle ok dogg I'm sorry for this shit
Blah...
wtf cruc are we gonna fight over this I don't need a fuckin forum man we will get better than steal one back it is all good dogg....have the win and do u have hate dogg cuz I want to be tight wit ya
checkin in...... yo wats good my niggas
*wow...*wow... 1st off homie, str8 disrespect sayn i might be a snitch... Homie understand this, Ive done *Prison bids, for not snitchn, not proud of it, but you know what, I live by that code. Fuck your snitchn theory.. So to come out ya face homie and say that, I take offensively.... Fuck w/e's goin on... I never did shit to you, I never... You know what.... Dont bother homie... Thats fucked up... I hope you well in all your affairs... once had the respect there, but you played yaself, homie...Quote:
Originally Posted by Nefarious
if you do topicals, and are pretty good, drop a link to that, if not we aint takn try outs for text heads. sorry pz-outQuote:
Originally Posted by ab0ve
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Originally Posted by Tha-Joka
fuck joka wacth ur self dawg don't come in here startin shit
First off, bad move implying kali would snitch you out, the guy has been nothing but on the level, so it's easy to see just who's bitch made in this affair. If you irnogrant ass can't understand my meaning, well in simple english, you're the bitch if I ever seen one on RB. That speaks volumes alone man. No matter who you are, who you log in as, you will always be remembered as the kid who;Quote:
Originally Posted by Nefarious
1. Claims to be dope, but nothing you do backs that up
2. Posts like a third grade kid born addicted to crack
3. Makes absolutley no sense
4. Had a bitch fit when Bounce called you on your talent or lack thereof
5. Resorted to vulgar and dispecable language in reference to a little girl
6. Talked trash that you could never back up to some of the best heads on site.
7. Talked about wearing a jersey with "new rapper" on the back at universal studios.
8. Then dared Devastator to come look for you and bring his plastic m16 in his sig. When in fact it's a military issue m249, not plastic, and he really is a a Veteran, deplyoed to a war zone, could own you in every facet of life, raps better than you ever will, and has more respect on this board than you will ever have in life.
9. Calls me out for a text battle when you are on the verge of a supposed record deal. LMMFAO at that, is there any label that is willing to sign a kid who handles his beef in text?
10. Will always be known as the reason RB brings back the Legedary Hall of Shame!!!
Yeah, you deseve props on that one, I mean we have had our share of idiots on this baord, but man you win hands down. Just refrain from ever typing my name again and your troubles will stay the same, but if you havent noticed the more you post my name, the more the site targets you. I tried to warn you man. Hey I might even unbann your name today, if no one else objects.
Good luck on that record deal, I mean I have seen loads of other members who are multitudes better than you who have no such luck, so either you are holding back here on RB, or some crack head started a record label. Either way, good luck to man, it's been a blast, thanks for playing!
kille and me both ahve bad record but that doesnt mean we cant lead a crew just lets see your spit boy
Yes it's Young Sqad we here str8 outta tha A who want
Yes it's Young Sqad come battle us
yo dis is immortality i just wanna drop a topical verse 4 a try out
ope u like it
i capture my doubt in my fist/ n crush it so it don't exist/ walking thru fog n mist/ has me pissd/ dunno wetha i missd the turnin/ but im learnin/ the fire inside isn't just there 2 burn i'm/ gonna ignite the fuse of ma tenacity/ n capture ne chance that plans on passin me/ n if im denyd the ride that ive cum 4/ then u'll kno wot my knukles r numb 4/ 4 sure/ im gonna risk woteva 2 b hu i wanna b/ im gonna get ma position ware y'all honor me/ y'all gonna bow down/ 2 the sound/ of me// now/ wen im crownd/ my round/ will b// c the doubt is history/ no more pain nor misery/ i'll excel infront of y'al it'll b kept no mystery/ i'll exceed it wont get ne worse/ n y'all thought i was cursed/
cya rnd
immortality
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Originally Posted by Immortality
1st.. off- you should go through, take out all of them slashes....
2nd.. --- Fix your structure
3rd..---- work on your vocabulary
4th.----- Re-vise w/o the slang.
5th.-----give your topical a **topic
6th.-----battle someone in topicals, drop that link.
finally.... I dont know your activiy on RB, but get your posts up, become more active, win some battles, more than losses......
pz-out