Kritikal try-outs

But u spat aight, and it dont matter bout ur name anyway unless it says sumthin very stupid or sumthin racist.pz.

Ok for tha peeps that tried out....

Young Bless...your in stay up and active, u can rock the Kritikal siggy everyone else has...

Murdershewrote...elevate and get back to me cuz unless u have a really good battle, your gonna need some work, your structure is a bit wierd...but most importantly you need complexity in your rhyme scheme...

Blackguy...drop me a link to your battle or copy and paste your verse or whatever...

Yo sup Def, i rekon that Young Bless shoulda got in too, he got sum skills.

Yo im out, ill be bak on in like 10hrs or less.pz.

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Originally Posted by Knoxxious

Im still here tryin to prove to myself i aint a waste of space,
You should think of ppl thats doubted u, & aim to take there place,
Grab a gigantic eraser, and rub out your name from that list,
Caus if ya keep ur mind on track, ya wont hav to live of gat clips,
You see that dumpsta there? Thats my home car and bed room,
So show those techers sum knowledge, or u'll end up poor or dead, dude.

Yo, where should we put the chorus? or shouldnt we even have one? caus its really only a open mic. But ur the lasy so its up to u.

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We don't have to have a chorus

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Originally Posted by Knoxxious

Im still here tryin to prove to myself i aint a waste of space,
You should think of ppl thats doubted u, & aim to take there place,
Grab a gigantic eraser, and rub out your name from that list,
Caus if ya keep ur mind on track, ya wont hav to live of gat clips,
You see that dumpsta there? Thats my home car and bed room,
So show those techers sum knowledge, or u'll end up poor or dead, dude.

Yo, where should we put the chorus? or shouldnt we even have one? caus its really only a open mic. But ur the lasy so its up to u.

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You know what dawg
I'm bout to go back to school
And show them crazy teachers that this girl is no fool
Its time to get on my shit
If I don't I might end up dead
or at the neighborhood corner store
Lookin all strange or smokin crack in da back of the drug dealers lac(cadillac)

its phobia.....

not too many battles i usually only cypher or battle when im bored but peep the links anyway:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=165173
^^^me vs. vert i won by dq though^^^

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=164179
me vs pyro or some shit i dunno but i lost just fuckin around on that one

so im in..?

Yo, sup kritikal, i said i'd be bak in 10hrs and i was.LoL. Is there anything i need to kno bout?

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Originally Posted by DuvalRapStar

You know what dawg.
I'm bout to go back to school
And show them crazy teachers that this girl is no fool
Its time for me to bounce back and get on my vocation
If not i'll end up dead wit no bread
When lil kids pass me they'll run cuz i'm their phobia(i think thats how u spell it)

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Yo, ummmm, is that the chorus or another part of the verse? & its just that the last three lines didnt rhyme to me. I aint criticising just tryin to help.pz.

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Originally Posted by DuvalRapStar

We don't have to have a chorus

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Aight coo, that'll be good. But i dont mind if it has a chorus or not, its totally up to u man.

well, i've been told before, my ryhmes are random and wack?/
i dont care cause when i beat on those fools it means jack/
cause they thinking they going to win, but really i got a trick of some kind?/
really the battles are mine, some times even the first line messes with your mind/
you suspect im some chump, but really i make everybody wanna jump?/
when im in the place, prepare, caus decievin' looks'll make the shotty pump/.
J would represent wit' the kritikal crew with joy & pride?/
the other crews wont even step, caus they aint gon' wana slide/
well this is over and done know iam going to rob a k mart for fun?/
the 5-0 wont catch me and know iam going to be on the run/

Yo J, when Def comes online, he'll tell you if u've made it or not.pz.

wont be on till morning so PM me if im in or not