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You know what this reminds me of in a conceptual kind of way. Something I wrote a long time ago, I went with the same topic, but did it in a less direct approach. I used heavy metaphors to paint the same type of picture here. I couldn't think of what it was last night, but I remembered this morning. I supply you a link, and you can see where our ideas on such a subject tie. It's just that I have access to much more information that the majority of the population, so I wrote it from a classified type nature.
Governed by Shadows
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=141691
Notice how my long lines never were a factor in this peice making legendz. It's not so much having stretched lines being a problem, but when people say streached they usually mean forced content in the lines. Not to mention syllable count, most can not spit in audio upwards of 20 syllables a musical bar. This is where people question the line lenght of a peice, those who know my music, know I can pull off a bunch of syllable per bar, so when I write sometimes I'm going to have 20 syllables a bar.
I think this would be a good example of taking your ideas and writing them in a way that makes people think and feel your work on an intellectual level. I think I'm going to make you a project and work with you on elevating. It's up to you...
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^^I would appreciate your help or in ur terms becoming a project of yours lol.....
....like i feel as though its there....i just have a hardtime expressing it in a topical form..so to speak
like twixn said in ss chat...i am much wiser in discussion then i am at writing...and that bothers me...so ur help would be great!
