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upping 4 feed........thx 4 previous
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thanks 4 all the feedback u guy's drop some links
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ya good shit, digged vanifest rhymes the most
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nice collab yall good shit. Yall definitely put some emotion into dis shit and kept it real.
The first verse had good ass vocabulary and multis. Ya kept it rhymin throughout the entire verse which some mufuckas dont like but you made it work. The only thing i can say is to work on your lines cuz they was long as fuck but overall good shit.
The second verse had a lot of emotion but Id didnt like the way the words rhymed at the end of each bar. You kept it real tho' and used a nice metaphor bout the overheated car line. Good shit overall just try to make your rhymin words go together better.
The third verse was nice and really showed the emotions put into this drop. There were a couple of bars that coulda went together better like the 3rd and 4th bar. but really you dont really need to have all the fuckin metas, similies, wordplay, and multis as long as you still make it tight so good shit all together.
keep it up yall.~one~
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this was nice somthings i did not like but it was good
