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Nice piece, this could have had a bit more emotion in, but for your age - you had some amazing literature. I like the way you talked about the shadow.. Kind of metaphorical, but then it kind of made me think 'huh' when you said how it left. I mean how can your shadow just leave you lol... But i see where you took it and it wasnt a bad thing.
Wording of lines was brilliant, you had nice rhythm in the lines.. easy to read, and that last bit just Owned 90% of OMs being dropped by people these days.
Nice work dude Keep it up.
um...LMAO at copyin someone elses feed.....if you really think that coo...but id appreciate it if you dropped your actuall opinion
I left feed on yours now leave it one mine.Quote:
Originally Posted by -=|TumTum|=-
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ok...i'll drop my own opinion....i was feelin the topic...it was creative and pretty interesting to read about.....your vocab was prretty complex and same wit ya rhymes they werent elementary.....good job on that..flow was smooth continuesly....and strucutre was good and even throguh out...good drop man...it was tight..keep it up ..peace and can you check out my battle link in my sig and vote..thanks..
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dis was an ok verse u cuda put more detail
strucutre was fine
flowm was ok
wordplay u cud kinda work on so u can ummmph the om
LMAO at you...WTF is ummmph the OM....
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come on yall...i was gettin hella good feed now none...lmao lets get it