Elevation Thread.

I look up in the sky, the reflection of the sun shines off my eyes/
anotha day on the grind, be out till the moon come out or the spot gets dry//
another day in the life, had to switch my shit up cause i was scrapin bottom/
enemy of the state right, cops lookin at me like im fuckin ausama bin laden//
attitude so fuckin rotten, thought I had nuthin to live for except the dough/
like busta said gimme some mo, more problems not only the cops but sheisty kids kept robbin//
I had to look over both shoulders, kept my burner by my dick so i could keep my shit safe in a pinch/
never flinched kept movin, till i was in the club and got stabbed in the neck..........shit!

how hard is it to understand , a topic someone has given, or diss the person above you.... if u want to post some shit that you think is good go start a new thread ... dont fuck someone elses threads up liek that

Topic: stop freeposting noobs

these niggas need to stop before the shotgun spits
and im not refferring to the rhymes that these noobs are not gonna kick
freepoasting or free loading its possibly either
because theyre probably biting the shit cuase theyre probably readers
i was one once and probably still am considered by some
but i never liked free posting or administered one
these new niggas like to drift off topics
and it gets messy like when you shit off target

next topic: gettin high with your father

[B]you got some nice lyrics. you should work on keeping your lines about the same lenth or around the same number of syllables. good work with a hard topic. the shit off target line was hot.

i walked into the crib, to a house full of smoke/
saw my dad wit a blunt, and a few rocks of coke/
i said wutchu doin man, i thought u saw yo P.O./
he said "i went but it dont hurt if he dont know"/
i walked in, sat down and said "cmon then lemme hit too"/
then he said "this is what i was smokin when i made you/

damn that topic was more diff. then i expected.

next topic: your girl tells you she wants to turn gay

nice flow man, it brought the concepts to lyric and had good rhymes. keep it up homie.

i was writin this while you posted so whoever continues the cypher go with his topic, above.......


oh shit, grab the stash i think your dads back,
hes got some pizza some acid and some snack packs,
"Hey kids lets drop cid and smoke a blunt, roll it up with
hashhish- oil and spark it up"
i did just that, the shit knocked the kids' pops out,
look in the top shelf for medicine to help with his health,
but first i'm eatin pizza, a stoned homie knows it enough
that he'll see the old geezer, return from comatosis
i'll fuckin coax him, grab acid and staple it under his nose tip,
oh no he's gonna die hes just too stoned, he woke up with his throat cut from tokes of the dope smoke puffs,
the room was spinnin for him and he seen a demon,
legions of teams of beavers were collonizing the TV reciever,
thats when i left and i never heard of the outcome,
of what becomes of the drunk bum dad of a chump in the slums

nice pro', it was easy to follow n i liked how u strung da vocab in smoothly...

peep da freestyle, edited with quotation marks 4 better understanding...


As my girl turns to me i can already tell wut shes gonna say
so she opens her mouth and says "baby i think im turnin gay"
well what a way to spoil the day i thought i was gettin some pussy, hip hop hurray
so i stay silent n its quiet except for outside we hear the cop sirens
"say somethin" she says, but im lost for words
wutever happened to the bees, now its just the birds n the birds?
"what does a girl got that i cant give u?"
"well for one thing, the size of ur dingaling is not the main issue"
"phew! then why the sudden change of sex preference?"
"well u see baby its all bcuz of ur 'FUCKING' NEGLENCE!"

NT: Written or Free'?

Sorry Poetic Jusdiss but I gotta diss you I was feeling some of your lines but
when i seen that hip hop hooray shit i just had to do it. so sorry here it goes

Who nicer than windy yo i like to meet him/
looked in the mirror finally seen him/ politely greet him/
Battle anybody and i'll likely beat em/
yo girl turned gay cuz we was having a threesome/
called her bestfriend said she with a fine ass nigga/
he got a half ounce n a gallon of liquor/
we all smoked out n the drank comes to end/
now its time to let the sucking fucking begin/
gotta bag up twice never hit it raw/
she had the time of life like she did it before/
her friend on the floor butt naked passed out/
your girl do me a favor take me to my man's house/

Next Topic: If you had a twin would you try to sleep with his girl w/out him knowing or her

Alright not really hard punches here more like ... I fucked ur girl cuz I'm a gangsta you wanna come more creative than that ... it takes some practice but you have potential you more then likely freestyle a bit or at least you write like you could have some experience in that area .. I don't really like ur topic .. so no hate but I gotta diss ..

This kids faking the flavor .. like flavored condoms he's slick ..
and close your eyes for now or later but your still sucking dick..
This kids hoping for a wish... like tom Hanks he's thinking big..
cuz I'll jump off a bridge if hip hop's futures REALLY in your sig ..
I can tell that you gutter .. but that don't mean that your nice ..
Hip Hop Ain't for every brother you were meant for sacrifice ..
J money thinks he's nice but I never felt the album ..
and If captian save a hoe then plz somebody help him ..
I swear to god study your literature and all your what haves..
cuz chicago ain't been poppin since the golden age of jazz..



Topic - Fake your best gangsta .. or diss me

i liked ur punches and i like ur style of rhyme
i aint no gangsta so why fake it...im just a emcee...ima diss

underrated u think u a true emcee but i could see thru ya
i figured u out quicker than i do psychological peliculas
seepin draws from a bitch i leave u like a creampie
i peeped ur flaws, u spit ur rhymes they fertile u just come dry
my lyrical missiles aimed n homin' i wouldnt need a miracle
to hit with this spherical device that'll bring u to ur peril
dare to step to me i paralyze from the waist down
get a grip, i load a clip into my mind n not a nine degrade clowns
founding father of freestyle forever i shoulda been
cuz this niggas overrated n IM under- just take a look at him

NT: make a definition of this word by rhymin'- Violentalist

forgot to post what i liked about ^^^..

i figured u out quicker than i do psychological peliculas,
that lind had nice vocab in it.

my lyrical missiles aimed n homin' i wouldnt need a miracle
that one kind of through off that flow alittle bit. it kinda stuk out cause it was the 5th bar.

over all the shit was tight for a freestyle. but it can always get better. in not the one to critisize cause im no 2 pac or jay-z.

ok i got to rhyme Violentalist, this aint a diss but learn how to spell its Violentlist,
envy this cause the definition of this petty word is,
shit i dont really know been smoking to much canabis,
wish it would come to thought but right now its emptyness,
fuck it ima take a guesse could it mean i got a violent-list,
of people to split throw the metal spiraling quick,
or could it be a instrmental operator in the opra or that one naz hit,
pause quick oh shit wait a min, i got the definition but ima spit scenarios playin with it,
this is like street brawls where body have to be hauld,
like the aftermath of a jump of a cliff free fall,
no parashoot is the only flaw to your plans outcome overall,
i spit this quick nigga 6 1/2 bars,
cause im trying to elevate in every aspct win lose or draw.

next topic.. try to rhymes the alphabet like
Answer to now one hold my own gun,
Bitch aprouched me so i gave her some more cum.

and keep it goning.

i wasnt really feelin the rhymes it was kinda weak mostly cuz it was a hard read n the rhymes were off a couple syllables but i was feelin how you tried to use the wordplay



the streets are war i deserve my stripes like a Zebra
i stay to let my dough rise like Yeast
see me with a gun my bitch swing the sword like Xena
play n ill let my hoe slice, make your whole fam Weep
i would do it myself but when i stick its somethin Vaginal
plus ya'll put yourself on a pedastool in reality your Unadmirable
im the guy most hate cuz im so damn Tenacious
try takin mine the flow gone leave you Sedated
that goes for anyone, i might get banned for puttin the forum in a Recession
or maybe cuz i lash out without warnin cuz im not one for the Questions
forget a judge when i battle cover the scene with Police
cuz when i shut my eyes with a silver mic to my lips im Obscene
im a green lanter an evil genius bout to do with rap what hitler did with Nati's
im heated easily dont make me snap like the paparazzi leave you in a still frame for Mommy
if my pace is to fast for yours i cant slow you need to sip some Lean
so watch yourself, i know what your doin before you cuz my sense is Keen
im negatively positive only death can give me the Jitters
its only gonna get better or worse so prove to me your Iller
cuz the time it takes for your softness to Harden
is the same amount of time it takes for them to find your body in the Garden
and dont make the mistake of invitin your friends to war cuz no fire is Friendly
thats why you'll catch me with neutrals or dolo cuz if its dark im comfortable firing til Empty
or i can do it in silence like i was walkin with a cloak n Dagger
im what you would call a genius with a punch n lines like Casius(clay)
he asked for somethin n gave it plus i wrote it Backwards
therefor im a threat to the best and the want me Abolished

Next topic- goin legit

Eh.. it was alright. that first few lines were wierd, but I got the point...
the vocab was pretty good but I feel like a lot of it was forced...
I can see you've got potential...keep workin' on it...

I'm goin' legit, gettin' it quick, cuz i'm all about my paper
came in the game swingin wild and hard like haymakers
I been in the studio all week tryna record tracks
I even got one over the beat of Styles P's "I'm Black"
This A&R he straight approached and offered me a deal
It was around lunch so he took me out to get a meal
I was like is this for real, you can't imagine how I feel
I almost signed the contract but before it was sealed
I had my lawyer look at it to make sure it was real
It was clear to me my obligation so i kept it tight
Took the pen outta my pocket and then proceeded to write
In spite of my happiness my joy it turned to pain
Cuz now I'm singed to a record label owned by none other...
...than the game...AWWW MAYNE...

Next topic- gettin some ass in ur grandmas house...while shes home

ur flow was wack.u need to elevate.im not hatin.serioulsly ELAVATE..

*MY BAD I WROTE ON THE WRONG TOPIC I WROTE ON THE LAST ONE FROM THE FIRST PAGE* THE TOPIC WAS ur gurl for 5 years just had a baby and ur the daddy

flirtin wit a chick for the past 2 years,she say my game tight
she workin wit the dick,cum passed through her ears,got the call that same night
bitch from 5 yearz ago,yellin,she excited
yo was goin on,she tellin,rather reciting
she sayin my baby here,she like dude u tha pops
i came to her house,went smoothe through the locks(she didnt hear me come in)
see her wit another niga,like damn,f.uckin b*itch
she ran like f*uck the shit,her man up n shit
he talkin to me like im stupid,like im a 4 year old
so i walk up to him,but there before he holds,
my newborn baby,like get ur hands of my son, niga i will kill ya
guess this niga understands that this my new la familia(family in spanish)

:givesaf: :2thumb:

n/t u robed a store and ur niga snitched

it was tight considering your 12, you gone elevate regardless but it just takes time, try to make your flow more complex. like the way you explain the situation seems alittle simple, work on cleaverness.

got the hoodie got the mask got gloves got the gat,
load the slugs lock it back get in quick leaven fast,
first thing we gotta do is bust the camera for the proof,
and if the worker feelen brave bust one up in his tooth,
grabs some chips OE's, blunts, and condoms on the way out,
car pulled up, skeeted back on the way to the house,
but then my nigga started talken scared like "what if the cops find out"??,
i said "no one will know, cause if you snitch ill blow your mind out",
so a week went by things on the streets started heating up,
cherikee's and black explorers was spotted but they aint seeing us,
next thing you know im getten ropped off put in cuffs,
i lost four dime bags but im glad i left the strap in the cut,
so now they got me in this room tryen to get me to confess,
but its kewl cause without my lawer they aint gettin a breath,
got off the chain from lack of evidence, word came up there snitchen among my resisdense,
when i find out who it is im going strapped like im hunting elephants,
found out it was the back stabbin phoney friend,
that i thought i could depend but all that shit has come to an end,
you fucked up cause i know where you sleep in your den,
i had him waken up to nightmars like freddy cougers revenge.

n/t- let me see your skills with musing multies, spit as many as you can in a rhyme.