A Thugs Wish ( A Must Read )

Ok, first of all, your rhymes are really basic. You seem to have a decent flow, but your rhymes and vocab are very plain. You need to maybe try some different things with bigger words, or even just words that are 3-4 letters, you know? I think you could make this 100 times better, with different wording. Gotta make your shit really stand out, and shock people.. I can see some definite potential, you just need to work on the way you word things, and working a better vocab into your peices man.
Keep at it, and you'll notice a difference.

Uppin for more feed i'll RTF on ur Om's for shore

Imma up this 1 more time people i need to see what else i could do better to make a good OM

alright kinda played topic.... could have been alot better if it was audio...i didn't really like ur structure kinda reminded me of a text battle.....your meta's were iight..not many (if any) multi's in that piece..

overall an alright drop could have been done better but you need to work on imagery, multi's & overall vocab..

pz

^^^ Thanks