it's appreciated. i'll hit your shit tonight, calm the fuck down and STOP FUCKING POSTING.
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it's appreciated. i'll hit your shit tonight, calm the fuck down and STOP FUCKING POSTING.
Lex - Alright, i see straight off the bat you tried to use bigger words, which is pretty good, but you need to make sure when multisyllabic rhyming comes into play, you dont seperatre the syllables with other words.. this was one of the problems in your verse... also your rhyme scheme was a bit complex at the beggining, but it got more basic at the end.. try and stay consistant throughout the entire piece.
Nashyboi - righty, i think you had the stronger verse out of the two, (no offense to leximus), but your rhyme scheme was pretty complex and the first five lines had a really complex flow to it as well. your multies and inners were pretty good as well, just try and not misspell the larger words.. which you did.. lol, g'd job nonetheless
good piece on both behalfs
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=299941
Werd^
thnkx.
This peice had good description and imagery to it. Its good to allow your reader to paint a picture with your words, that way they remain intrested. The topic was decent and both of your writting styles blend together well. Good work to both you.
Ok, nash your verse was pretty well done, it allowed me to get a glimpse of your ability to write on a subeject that demands great detial. For the most part i thought you did a good job here. I enjoyed your portion the most and I will detial why in a bit. good job, and elevation is appearant.
lex, I can slo see some elevation here, but for the most part it was good mixed with mediocracy. The fact that you strived for a complex scheme full of multisyllabic strings and internals, is good. Although I don;t think you pulled it off. The word choice in your schemes, were flat out obvious and predictable. There were so many other words you could have used to fill in those schemes, but it's like you ranwitht he first thing that came to mind, or used a rhyme book of sorts. I can always tell, more so when the language is predictable. This is not a good practice and only hurts thw writter. I am not positive, but based on the contrast from previous drops and the oh so easy predictablilty i'd be willing to wager on it. Good verse, but inthe end, I think you could have done much much more with this. You did deviate form the conventional end of line scheme in places, which was nice to see I just think you could have beeter word choice and less predictable rhymes. Thjat comes with time and practice, so props for changing things up and givning it some effort.
Overall was a good read, I though the second part was good, but could have been much better.
Keep doing your thing gentlemen.
Cry, your turnQuote:
Originally Posted by Soulstice
lol...Thank you gentlemen.
word thanks a lot bounce. i tried :rolleyes:
this was nice, i like wen' u two do these together, u are both on the same page all the time, flow was nice, and imagery was nice, both of u from beginning to end, i am expecting to see more from you'll in the future, u had nice wordplay, more multies would've helped with the flow, but pretty much very good peice here
overal rating 8/10..........hit up my o.m. in the sig, thnx
^thanks.
will hit it by tomorrow.
Thankx all ready hit it up :)
Now shit why cant I drop like this now-a-days lol.