Just Woke Up.

Hello

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Originally Posted by ...Dusk2Dawn...

Interesting piece, vocabulary usage was nice as long with your choice of words. I feel that your chioce of words kept this flowing well because the structure was a kinda fucked up but the words you chose I felt kept in flowing nicely. The imagery was dope! It's late at night here and your opening made me want to fall a sleep not in a boring way but you just depicted it nicely. Stuck topic well, really an overall good peace.

And Im here far away from the days of the past.
My eyes wide open.. FINALLY..
.. I've awoken with hope and laughs.
And she knows she has my heart closed in her grasp.
I Gasp..
No longer am I staring at the back of my eyelids
No longer is defening silence blaring inside Rich
Because of her..
Im reminded of why I was blinded
She is the light that shined and guided..
Showed me the path when i couldnt find it.
Favorite part, dope

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...05#post4637505
^Hit that up please

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Hit that up please :(

An endless sight, the back of eyelids.. black as night.
Defenseless light, trapped in the silence.. acting like...
This is life..
But the facts ain't right.. All I did was attract a fight.
Distractions bite..
Cause I knew I bit off a little more than I could chew
I flew.. Into a relationship...
No.
More like I chased it through
I was mistaken too..
For taking a Miss who was as fake as you
But I couldn't shake the view...
My eyes were blinded by love's shaded hue..
So I faded to.. A miserable mixture of grey & blue..
The perfect picture of what a waste will do
I was searching for answers in a haze of clues
Confused.. I was lost in a maze of abuse.

was my favorite part. dude got 2, 383 posts so i had a feeling he was good from the start. the flow kept going and never stopped. similar to jay-z's rythm.

LOL... i have alot more posts than 2,383. Thats just what is up there. But thanks for the feed back regardless

Good Morning

My bad.. i would have upped this earlier but.. I Just Woke Up

^lmao

this was a nice peice,I really enjoyed reading it....your vocab was very good and you imagery made this peice in to something special, I really enjoyed this peice, I dunno why..it just did something for me that not many other peices can do. I liked your structure it made the peice flow well and made it very easy to read. you had great description in this peice and I liked the metaphors you used. Basically I enjoyed this peice a hell of a lot. I have never read anything from you before but after reading this, I will be sure to read and comment on any peices you put out here in the future. Lovely peice dude,I really enjoyed it. Pz

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...15#post4669215
leave feed on this please

Thanks.. Much Appreciated