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this was a nice piece and it definently had a point... hate is a powerful word and people rarely use it correctly saying i "hate" you/something is iligitimate and using it substantially is what is often deprived from the word or phrase i hate something is the actual meaning... so good thought was put into this piece and though the lines were stretched structure is not what contributes to this piece... i guess there was sort of an educated emotion to this piece either way though i was feeling it ... vocab was str8 but u didnt really need it and u didnt stretch or make it un-comprehendable for most... BUT GOOD JOB and RTF on my om Strung out in my sig
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I think the topic and attemp were good..Yet you could have played on different aspects of hatred....In most instances you were to repetitive ....and it started to read like a bunch of blah,blah, blah...not saying that you werent consistant in thought just didn't go that extra mile and get those hard facts of hate that are just mingling around awaiting to be processed through the mind ...This piece was every bit of a good attempt on a nice topic yet played a little bit wrong though...Yet Nice Try and keep at it elevation is the key ..
