tsunami

......yeh i could have experianced it.......but thanx...........more feed plz.........

leave feed on mine and i no u aint

^ Rational., I read that. It sucked balls. sounded like my 3rd grade teacher talking or some shit.

Micbig...

I see potential...I think you relied to much on us getting a mental picture in our head of the situation, I think you lacked in imagery here...Also, there were some misspellings...The rhyme scheme has been used, but it's not been used that much...nice to see something a bit different...The story line was decent, seen better, seen worse...Try working on your vocabulary, it'll make the read more complex...I see room for improvment, just go to Sacred Scriptures and read some of the writings in there and you'll see what I mean..

lmfao

leave feed then so i can improve

.......uppin.......

uppin......

mc can u checc out mah OM the link is in mah sig

ok i will........uppin........

uppin.......

topic was interesting to me. i liked it. i felt this peice. it had nice consistant flow. rhymes were good all the way through. and overall i liked it..my fav. lines were


homes in ruin, relationships in tatters
nobody cares how big or small everything matters
we live in a world that is now ruled by nature
people worry no matter what religion or culture...



good job

i really liked this. i actually saw what you were talking about as i read it. nice imagry. your wordplay was nice, your flow was decent, your structure was good. great job mc, stay up.

^^ u av just copied pasted that u loser u havent even left ur own feed i think thats biting?

i liked the emotion and creativity in this peice you got potential my fav bars where the 1st 3 bars :P good job homie

*leave feed on perspectiv of a soldier plz*

thanx for feed(syntext, dap , moe) appriciate it......uppin.......

let this die please ima do another thanx for all the feed appriciate it...