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nice spit
The whole thing was dope, I feel your concecept and it was creative no doubt. I felt the flow like if it was a beat to it as you flowed the beat would bring the flow along faster ya know If not just think about it but it's a nice flow no doubt only metaphore I didn't feel was ( I feel like im'm laying at the bottom like some tile grout) it fits the situation no doubt but I just think that was maybe too creative ya know keep it up----------------- this was the first rap I read here and im impressed --one
iight homie hope i give you insperation to reck
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that feed... wdf.. :thumbsdowQuote:
Originally Posted by G50
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Originally Posted by LAYDEEE SNYPAH
its great i know :2thumb:
lmfao.. u sure? lol.. ah well if u say so hun...
JK...uppin for some feed...
This was an excellent piece, had some minor flaws, but i enjoyed the emotion portrayed and the overall verse had a good feel, next time just use a broader range of vocabulary, not long word just something that sounds as good but can be used to shorten and imagarise ya piece. saying that more imagery would make it a better piece also. However, for your first attempt it's very good and best of luck for your next piece.
tks pak keep feed like that comin yall iight
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decent joint fosho
flo worked well.. hadf sum good rhymes.. but cudda been mo complex on the inner rhymes and rhyme scheme..
vocab was decent.. structure was..ok..cud b more..
had some good flows.. wording was generaly good.. maybe cudda had a couple stronger mettaphors added just to add deepness
stay up1
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