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Spekz: yo you got alot of talent hommie yo peice was very impressive and I give you much props you spoke truth and on the real that says alot cause if you look at it the rapgame seems to be falling because everyones getting to commercial its all about the cars,ya grill and the Trap to many rappers are becoming sheep and not lions ya heard me keep doing what you do cause if you speak the truth then who can say your not a real lyricist or real to what you speak music is an expression of self its your thoughts, your pain, your blood, sweat, and tears,and if you don't put ya heart into it then what good is hiphop? I really hope I will get to see more of your work main.....
The Iron Monk
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Well not much feed on the overall all piece other than the feel of it......however its a great breath of fresh air 2 have somebody drop feedback like this....because u can hear the same thing over and over again...and it feels good but when u get somebody sayin ur real with what u write..its dope
LOVIN ALL THE FB...glad for it all!
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June 1941 a year that stunned everyone was it genius or chilling news
a miliatary mastermind turning a country astray killing millions of jews
religion turnd against you by murderous ideas attacted on by all cost
brillaintly evil Adolf Hitler made ideas reality by creating the halocaust
taking away from society sweating out slavery that was wrong and sick
but think of the strong authority 1 possessd 2 make them go along with it
1865 slavery turns over abolished days over yet some feel hate with in um
races debate between'um,knowin slavery is ended only 2 create racism
^Wow nice. This part in particular..I loved how that part flowed and made so much sense at the same time. You deffinatly got the spark Spekz. I give you that. You've grown to be so much more since the diaries and personally I can't wait until I can do a collab again with you. You've elevated so much from when we introduced you into RB. I think you've come a long ways man seriously. Good job. GREAT read. So much of it was true and it was deffinatly a mind opener. Great piece,
Happy Valentines Day,
:love: - Nash
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=272490
^Spank that. Just a fun quickly written piece.
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Read this and your flow was great and the lyrics understandable great overall peice man
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Thanx urban for reading..
NASH-- Knowing you liked the piece, and believe i have come along way with my writing definetly means something, because my first big piece was a collab with you and some well known writers, so just hearing ive elevated is good to hear especially from you......SO THANX NASHY!..happyvday 2 u 2 lol.....ill hit up ur piece when i get home (at school now).......THANX AGAIN
PEC
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wel the feedback is coming in nicely..........so ill keep upping!
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this was pretty tight man. you did have alot in your lines but you kept it rhyming throughout them, so it went smooth for the read. the message makes you think forsure, so good job on that aspect. i'm not much, or any really, of a topical writer myself, so i dont really know what to comment on here. you wrote a good verse, what can i say. lol. keep it up.
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Thanx jay....lol textheads so nieve lol j/p.
THANX AGAIN!
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dude i loved this man.....it was quite enjoyful for me to read the vocab i thought was sexy son, the emotion was average, the imagery was quite interesting, i thought the rhyme scheme was done exceptionally well aswell, this was an interesting concept inwhich im not to sure i read or seen alot on this subject, well i have but not quite in the way you took it, nicely done man this is by far the best ive seen from you.
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.............I was gonna leave this be.........then i got bored...and then i got bored..nanananananananana.........so i UP'D it neways :)
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Man that was a good peice man really your structure was remarkable and you had a pretty dope concept and you took the advantage of dropping a dope verse the second one was the best
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June 1941 a year that stunned everyone was it genius or chilling news
a miliatary mastermind turning a country astray killing millions of jews
religion turnd against you by murderous ideas attacted on by all cost
brillaintly evil Adolf Hitler made ideas reality by creating the halocaust
taking away from society sweating out slavery that was wrong and sick
but think of the strong authority 1 possessd 2 make them go along with it
1865 slavery turns over abolished days over yet some feel hate with in um
races debate between'um,knowin slavery is ended only 2 create racism
all is not lost yet freakish ideas torment the world again this is evident
intentions were present when the presence of killers shot our presidents
devilish degrees snuck apon lincoln shot in silence life is what cost him
minds tossed this while kennedy told us to keep our heads, he lost his
wars created because of beliefs and unlawful acts that enemies attract
then enemies attact creating world wars,civil wars,to the war in iraq
Dope^^^^
I really liked that the whole thing was just................dope lol keep that up man for real keep elevatimg cause you can never stop and I'm gon try and do what you told me look out for more of my OM's coming soon..........................
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Thank your for the feedback....and i def. will keep rizin up.........
......ill be around so ill definetly be checkin ur future work, and appreciate u takin my advice..hopefully it will work 4 ya...
THANK KEEP UPZ
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sorry to freepost but why aren't you in a forumed crew???
