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that was scary and real... but i understand.. and i liked it i thought it was good... and yea i got respect for you also..
''Blood thirsty is an understatement, I hunger for the taste of sweet death''
that line reminded me of the misfits with danzig a song called last caress
but good work..
damn...this was real dope....not the best from u but this was still dope....vocab was really good..vocab was nicely put in places and complex....flow was very smooth made it an easy read..strucutre was good and even....topic was very interesting and i was feelin it all the way...overall this was dope...peace-
Thanks for all the feed guy's. And brassknuckles STFU, get at me on a Mic or keep your garbage out my thread!
Yes, this only an opening verse to a series of some serious illness to follow. It's for a project I was asked to drop a few songs on. More to come....
I enjoyed reading this, and came out well to say you only did it quick. This piece was intresting to say the least. I've never read anything from you or even had a link to your audio, but needless to say this was pretty dope for the first thing i've seen form you. At times i found it hard to follow your rhyme scheme but just about grasped it, i enjoyed your use of vocabulary in your rhmye schmes and multi;s.
"Greet Beth with a surgeons grin, as the cold steel embeds deep within"
I really liked that line but now have it pictured in my head which is gettin a but distrurbing.
Anway i thought your imagery was cool and your flow made the piece easy to read throughout. Strcture isnt the most important thing here but yours was still on point.
Overall...
Being that this is the first thing i've seen of yours, and expecting something good, i dont think i've been dissapointed, this came out as a really good piece and a enjoyable read, would appreciate links to your other work.
Also could you leave feed on my OM (in sig) only my second one n its being slept on, ne feed would be appreciated.
Nice work bounce.
Thanks, it was just a real quick write...