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just ignore everone to a certian point. in reality if you where to always think you not as good as you really are but keeping in mind that your the best. dont down yourself but prefect it and dont merdge your style untill your open to everyones style. at that point its all about practise and experience. training you and your mind is key in life, everones life is diffrent so everone has diffrent ways but the learning prossess is still the same. like guitar for example you train your hands and mind to use this tool to make music wich is pritty complex. anything is the same your just training yourself to make things you do easier, faster and better. in a sence you could do anything with this if you apply it to life it could help alot. ya words touch me but ya need to bring ya mind out onto paper alot more but ya good
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nice imagery. ............You had a bright and well done vocabulary.......... structure was on point which leads to good flow..........Nothing really forced either so that helped it, a bit more multis will help it out.
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Curtains closed, lights dimmed, some faintly flickering candles
Escaping satirical scandals, how malignant media mishandles
Getting locked up inside a fantasy world they came to create
Example of mental clinic’s bait for it’s an artist’s inevitable fate”
a alot more good quotables, good job
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...04#post3635304
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i thought the vocab and the flow was great, but i feel as if this verse was alittle played out with the font and all the spaces and the dots and shit, i feel like you where trying to make this too perfect and the imperfections in a verse is wat makes it special, but overall the verse was great i just didnt really like the presentation that you tried to, just seemed alitte cheesy, i just gotta do some constructive critisicm so atleast you can take sumthin from my feedback, feel me?, anyways yea this verse was good, 8/10...
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oh yea just hit up that link in my sig and that would be tight, peace.
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Multies: 7/10
Flow: 8/10
Vocab: 8/10
Structure: 7/10
Wordplay: 7.5/10
Emotion: 6/10
concept: 7/10 :2thumb:
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