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i liked all of ur concepts bounce...that was really deep...
i was really interested in it...u had sum killer vocab, and concepts on different things
but c'mon the human race aint THAT BAD...damn u talkin bout executing doomsday na'mean LOL
i liked the picture at the top...honestly i think it added more scenery...no lie u one of dem niggaz dat make me proud to be on rapbattles
The last two lines made me shiver, very very good. I haven't felt like that since I heard Mozart's Requiem for the first time (translated of course) - just gives you an idea of how much power God has.
"Quantus tremor est futurus,
Quando iudex est venturus
Cuncta stricte discussurus!"
"How great a tremor is to be,
when the judge is to come
briskly shattering every grave"
-Fuckin' Mozart - Dies Irae of his Requiem.
wow, in all my time here on RB I have never seen anyone other than myself metion requiem, great fucken read. Now about your name, that is my choice of drinks for sure. Absinthe, got to love the stuff.Quote:
Originally Posted by Absinthe
I'm flattered by your reply, thanks for taking the time. You should read soem of my other peices onhere if you liked this one...
Well, its like this man ..
Obviously, what caught my eye, was the choice of your title, its one of those eye catchers, if you know what I meen, something that you'd be skimming through, then all of a sudden, you see this title, and think hm, intresting, so that was a big plus off the bat. I clicked the link, and the first thing I had seen was a picture, the picture you had posted there, which had got me more into this, by now Im thinking, he really knows how to persuade people into wanting to get into his peices. The picture was intersting as well. I read the WHOLE entire thing about, Id say, 4 time. Catching different things everytime. Everytime I read a peice from ANYBODY, I read it once for everything, once for imagiry, once for flow, once of multies, all that stuff. Let me congradulate you on being one of the first people Ive seen word such an extrodanary peice, so well. You couldn't have worded it any better. The rhyme scheme, was more of a poetic type, which I liked it, because it added a twist into it. The flow, and multies, were great, it flowed perfect, you didnt have a whole lot of multies in there, but when you did, there was no choppy'ness invloved, went straight through, reading it like a book with no commas. The imagiry was nice as well, the picture is what really helped this peice of work, and with imagiry comes wording, which I stated before, was very nicely done. The one thing, I didnt like very well, was the structure, I know structure doesnt meen anything really, its more how the peice is told, and how its written, but me, personally, I like to read a peice that has nice structure to it, it helps me follow along, enjoying the peice better. GREAT job none the less ..
.. I really, really enjoyed this peice, this was the first time I read something from you Bounce, maybe you have better stuff from the past, but I liked this for some reason. Keep up the good work man, Im looking forward to seeing you drop here in the future.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=254378
Please rtf if you dont mind. Thankyou.
Peace.
^ I will peep some of your work soon.
Also, ab out the structure...
Use your control key and mouse wheel to adjust the settings of your browser.
You should see, three stanza's all comprised of 11 lines each. If you are getting a jumbled structure, it's your browser and how it's displaying this verse. A few have mentioned the same thing. If you adjust your settingds as I described you will see how thise verse is supposed to be structured/displayed. .
This was nice. I like your concept. It flowed well, the structure was also nice.The topic was also nice. I like your vocab and creativity. Overall you did a dope job. 10/10. You deserve it. I think you hit all my links. But if you didn't you can leave feed. PZ
*smokes weed and disappears into the smoke*
This shit was hard, u got me from tha begining to tha end.
I liked tha rhyme scheme u had going.
If I had ta rate this between 1-100, it would get a 93.
Keep It Pimpin Pimpin
I really enjoyed this. The imigary was outstanding, it gave me pictures in my mind of a futuristic world, maybe destroyed by nucular war where there is so much death and destruction. Post apocolyptic.
The sad thing is if im right its about the world as it is now. You obviously know your stuff there are lots of details in there and references to help the story along, it was technical in most places.
It definately gave you a sense of loss or sorrow, quite depressing actually but im guessing that is the desired effect.
amazing rhymes man keep it going strong, you got one hell of a structure to ya work, your rhymes are hot as well, kepp it up peace man 9/10
I already read this, but this was dope as fuck and I see you still know how to write when you actually try Bounce..wish you would drop more..this was dope..you already know that though..pz
^Thank you, and I am sorry I do not have time or motivation to write for RB. Trust that I am writting on a daily basis, and maybe I'll share soeme of that sexyness with you one day...
yo thats dope...nice imagry...very deep.