Almost died for them (a unused SS verse)

good drop i was really feeling it..........kinda like i was there when it was going on.......story's 2 me are 1 of the best type of peices.........so :thumbup:...........jus like i always say we all have room 4 elevation so elevate.......even if it's onlii a lil...........keep droppin

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yo that shit wuz dope crazy imotional.
stay up
one CA$H

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ayo nice ass drop my dude...i was feelnig it good story-telling

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I dunno man...Either its your habit or you just like to write this way....You force a lot of rhymes like i said in your last one lol...Sounds like Something with 50 cent....Your saying 2 words that don't rhyme but saying them in a certain axcent so they rhyme.....lol, It's all good tho....At least you stay on topic and structure isnt out of wack....Like I said before the only thing you need is vocabulary........Work on that and keep writing...PEACE.....Comment in my other OM's....

i did like this piece not the best ive seen from u VA but not bad you had good emotion the rhyme scheme was off but the overall piece was nice i like the dedication at the end good respect and sorry that that happened to you keep at it mayne the topic was aight but like i said ive seen better from you but goodjob

Man i felt this shit, it had so much emotion but it lead me down to a bigtime because the story felt rushed and shit....but i feel like you have so much to learn from in so much time, just take your time little one....take your time!

Anyway, can you peep my battle man.......


http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=220755


Thank You, i'd appreciate it!

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This was a good drop for real, the topic really touched me about your friend man. I'm sorry about that shit you herd, must of been tough. Anyway you could of been more complexed with your rhymes, at sum points i thought it was a lil weak, but the deep topic made up for it. Good piece

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NUTHIN BUT CLAPING FOR ME.
Keep that shit up homie.

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