When The Sky Falls

couple more replys on this peice

that shit was nice, had alot of emotion...you can just let ure imagination run wit this piece...so many different ways to play it off in ure head good shit.

word....up.

damn homie...this was a ill drop...errythang was nice about it...imagery..vocab...EVERYTHANG!

thnks

scrolling down this page i just realised how incredibly long your sig is lol...this piece was tight, held up and supported by flow and a range of vocabulary. Beautiful picture painting, a nice short but effective little piece that was packed with the sort of origional stuff i like to read.

peace homie.

thanks

This piece was solid mang, i was feeling your imagery, and this topic is played....but you pulled out the story nicely. Good job on that homeskillet biscuit. Just keep dropping, and staying active and you'll get better ;D

Pz. and thanks

thanks.

Very well written...had great imagery and emotion (probably your highest points in the piece), good use of vocab throughout, and i liked your rhyme scheme on this..my fav bars:
"When the Sky Fell i was in captivity,limited memory
infinite similies,and my mind confines my sensorys"
&
"clouds shroud tha sky like a crowd of dark figures
lightnin swells,excitin my cells,bright as hell,but bigger"

imo i can't see a single flaw in this piece...great work...ima nominate this piece for HoF..peace..

wow. i mean im speechless.................. that shit was nice it was deep and all that shit. i really liked it. holla back at ya girl for that collab fam

thnks for the replies...and i really appreciate the nomination for HoF...thisll be my first piece to get nominated for HoF...all though it wont get in the HoF...its nice to see my piece actualy nominated for HoF...thnks..and im still down for tha collab boo....i dropped my SSjr verse..so im waitin on Kontext to drop.1~

yo that was real. u just killed it tha whole way thru. i loved how complex ur rhymes were and it all flowed perfectly, check out my open mic FOR MY BOO holla back

This piece gets thumbs-up from me. A good topic with fluid multis and strong vocab to bring it to life. The imagery was al ittle hazy in places, but shockingly sharp in others. A decent length too. A word of warning though: dont overuse multi's if it means sacrifcing making sense to do it. You've definatley got talent as a writer, not its all about the little details. I'll be checking for more of your stuff.

Keep posting, thanks for the reps.

Damn man.. this was a very good piece rite here.. much much much much much props lol.. the structure was good but struct. dont matter.. its more of flow.. the flow was good also.. everything was jst perfect.. iono wut to tell u to elevate.. jst keep writting hommie..