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this was dope..i was feelin the topic....rhymes were good not really that complex but had sum good ones..flow was smooth most of the time sumplaces were jus a bit off..just slightly...strucutre was good....overall this peice was good..8.5/10..stay up..peace
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hmm..despite the content of your verse, i'd say this was decent...the flow was smooth, you had nice detail and imagery..you set a solid emotion throughout the piece, your vocab was also complex, one thing though is that the bar about school shootings and babies seemed forced..probably could make your rhyme scheme more complex with more multies and internal rhyming...keep writing..i'll be lookin for more from you..oNE
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dude this ish is deep and hot. ^vortex sayin "uhm... decent..." lool wtf id like to see u do any betta bro...
thanx for the feed back yall uppin
had some nice political views on this one... nice take on it... got the personal views intertwined... would be decent audio set up... but yeah not bad at all... keep at it man..
good work...
check out... my most recent. the skate or ghost.
thanx yo
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This piece was pretty dope.You had a good Storyline to go with the topic.But I think you could have went deeper into the topic in my opinion.But you had good Imagry cuz when I read this I could picture in my head what was oin on in this piec.You had a good structure and good use of vocabulary too.But overall this was a dope piece.Keep up the good work.Hope to see more from you soon.Keep on writing.
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yo truth c what part of the bronx u rep