Anticipation

content was tight...

nice vocab, but personally i felt u forced it a lil bit

work on your multis... rhyme scheme was alright... i don't like how u rhyme 3 lines.... but i like the internals you through in at the end

doesn't seem like you wrote with a beat... frownable...

but overall was decent, i give it a 7/10

Good shit kid...Nice deoth and crap lol...Rtrn the fva and feedback on my open mic

nice shit...i liked da wurd usage an erry thang else

Word This Was Aiight Ya Flow Was There U Should Have Made It More Complex...

im feeling this great imagery good stuctures some alright vocab great syllable count this was a great peice most fo all the 1st verse had a nice flow and syllable count for it, tight ass ish here, pz

RTF links in the sig

that was some hot shit i was feelin ya message

thanks for all the feedback

Word Play Was Nice And Rhymes Off The Hook Nice Piece For Sure....Good Shit..Peace

nice flow, and i can def relate, i got a piece omin out wit same title. i enjoy the wordplay, and how you made every line worth reading the next. good job man...

that was tight thanx 4 the feed back on my freestyle
i will take your advice

Quote:

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Originally Posted by CrazyCarl

Feelin anticipation....and I'm ready to blow
I'm fearin what I really don't know

All this tension in me is now built up inside
extra attention to how my thoughts divide
is applied, to who can I truly confide
to end all of my stored anticipation
I need to do more than simply waiting
I'm going insane as my mind's creating
added strain is put on as I'm debating
what it is that I should plan to do next
looking at possibilities from all aspects
but to my dismay I'm surprised to find
that everyday I seem to be inclined
to dwell incessively on the negative
not successfully find a way to live
but still, until this event finally occurs
I will, not be able to clear my mind's blurs
feelings from thought to action transfers

Feelin anticipation....and I'm ready to blow
I'm fearin what I really don't know

when the experience is over, I feel an emotional release
my anticipation decrease gives me a certain inner piece
that can only be achieved through my own goal completion
having not believed in yourself leads to self-control depletion
now that is over, I go back to working on life's other problems
along the way keeping track of how I was able to solve them
make sure I learn my lesson, not the same mistake twice
I just seem to be pressin, to have my decisions be concise
take this verse as a blessin, and I hope you use this advice
you shouldn't be stressin over the mind's defensive device
that is to try to start messin with your thoughts only to entice
you to start obsessin, when what you already have will suffice

Feelin anticipation....and I'm ready to blow
I'm fearin what I really don't know

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that shit is hot, i notice you try to be as articulate as possible, and that's cool, but if you want motherfuckers to feel they're hearing a rap verse than you should make the script look more like a verse. there was a couple of mispelled words in there. "piece" was one of them. "inner peace " is the correct term. thats cool if you seriously want to let dudes know that you're intelligent. i get excited and type out shit quickly too so its all good.
being an aspiring male hip hop artist like myself, you have to let motherfuckers know what you're about, you know? keep the shit real