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still_remain...
hmmm...you had some good imagery and i'd say some okay emotion in this topical,also you stayed on topic pretty well teir mate!hmmm.i know flow dont matter too much in topicals but you flowed well in this piece man...and the structure wasn't too bad...overall id say my opinion on your verse was that its pretty good
camrok...
hmmm....you also had some flawless imagery man,and the emotion in this was no weak,you did however go in to details and expressed things well in this piece.and you stayed on topic pretty good in this topical,and ur vocab was okaay also,and ur structure with flow was okay....
still remain-had the flow,structure,emotion,and better job staying on topic
camrok-had the imagery,expression,and vocab
overall this was pretty close battle,but i fell still remain edged this out with better flow,emotion,structure,and stayed on topic a little better,camrok yes u did have dope imagery,vocab,and inner expression but it wasn't enough...
props to both writers this was a pretty good battle....
and im glad i was able to peep it
good job on both sides but the winnr is...
v/still_remain
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Cam
Verse was real nice I like the imagery and the way you worded your lines. Vocab was on point and structure looked good. All and all I say your verse was real nice.
Still
You had a better verse........ the story was great. Wording and imagery was also real nice. Vocab was on point and structure looked real good. My vote goes to you for a more witty verse that caught my attention a little more.
v/Still Remain
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I really enjoyed readin both pices of work, both packed emotion and sent a powerful message, i liked the fact that remain showed his poem thru gods perspective. But i didnt like the flow of the poem, it started of great, but then it got shaky at times, all in all, i liked camrok topical a smigen better, he had a nicer flow to his poem, and he painted a picture with every line. His poem was uplifting, and brings hope to its readers for a better tomorrow, he also, used more extensive vocabulary, still remain, i feel u did a great job, but IMO i think Camrok got u by a little, his poem wasmore powerful emotion wise. BUt great work from both of u, please return the favor and good luck to both in attaining a victory in this battle, battles are in my sig
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V/still remain
still-wordplay-nice u had a good twist usin vocab/images put in the reader-were there i got a some good visuals from the descriptiveness/literacy-very decent it was accurate to a certain extent in two lines you lost me but i caught up afta those 2/overall-6/10
camrok-wordplay-very good it was very mature and u had a better hold on ur words/images-i got some good ones but then they got mixed up as you went along you skipped into too many religions at once/literacy-was decent not too well put or used/overall-3/10
