^^^sry bout talkin bout the flow twice my bad i didnt realize i wrote that
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^^^sry bout talkin bout the flow twice my bad i didnt realize i wrote that
out of all of u i think lost souls came da hardest. he had good structure and flow...
vocab was good......i dont know it just flowwwwed better
dats jus me though
^ thanks for the kind words..
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Long as fuck...I like Timeless and Judge's verses the best...Overall good tho
[FormulaMC]
Wasn't really feelin it...your flow was a lil off...lines were a bit stretched
You did use multis nicely..Overall ok
[Timeless]
This was dope...like how you incorporated names from crew members
in ya verse...you did it well....up ya vocab...flow was there..good job
[LethalNJectionz]
Good verse...every line was right on except for when you named all the
crew members..that kinda screwed up the flow...but everything else
was niceQuote:
Originally Posted by LethalNJectionz
[L0st S0ul]
Ok verse....spent too much time talking bout yaself instead of reppin
your crew I thought...but you came well..flow was there definitly...
up ya vocab and rep mo
[LM]
Decent..straight and too the point...flow was on and off...structure was
on target..repped well for the most part..verse hit me as too simplistic tho
Overall it was Ok tho
[wogzta]
Pretty good...I was feelin the college lamp line...specially tonight...
you could focused more on reppin the crew instead of self reppin
sumtimnes... but still a good verse
[The Judge]
Dope...way to rep your crew and send a positive msg to them at the
same time...A real good 'leader' verse...nuthin bad to say..Keep at it
Overall a pretty decent Open Mice...repped the crew well...good job fellas
Please drop a critique here...yes all 7 of you mutha fuckers http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118104
^ now thats the kind of breakdowns we need.... good work lyric!!
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Thanks...but hit up the link!
yeh, that was really dope...... great work........
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That was dope as hell fellas.. really nice job. It was long.. but I dunno I just sat through it cause it was really pretty enjoyable to read. I'm not gonna break every person down quite like Lyric.. I dont have the time right now. But I wanted to leave a comment sayin u guys did a swell job at this. All could've repped the crew a little bit more instead of yourselves as much, but that doesn't dimish the quality of it. It was still dope. U should make some more......
Fav. verses on this goto.. Judge-lost soul- & Timeless.. all in pretty much a tie
Wog and LM weren't far behind them...
The other guys were good as well, but I think could've came better then what they did and their flows were off more
Overall: very nice
FormulaMC - decent peice, didn't exactly have a high point. It was very original, structure could be worked on a little bit more. Flow was a little basic, not much vocab was used with your piece.
Timeless - Nice! that was creative with the usage of names of all your members. Pretty interesting. At the end, it got a little boring, could have been worded better. but it was still a good piece.
LethalNJectionz - Decent, a few things could be fixed. The way your structure was, made everything look messed up. The way you write, is way to much.. You should do that like... at the most 3 times each verse. you do it every line. but ahwell. decent piece, not much to say.
L0st S0ul - A few bars started out good, then it came to the second line.. and it completely messed up. alot of your lines could be reworded. I've seen you do better though. But this piece was decent, not anything great.
LM - Wordplay! pretty nice, probably the most interesting verse out of everyones in this. Gotta give you props for that. MAD Wordplay, but yet maintained a good structure. Keep it up! Props
wogzta - Eh.. started off kinda choppy. Was exactly feelin it. I've also seen you do ALOT better than this. but anyways, a few of your lines were played. Especially the first bar. but no hate. i kno you have more potential.
The Judge - Sounded more like a tribute to your crew, which is pretty good. But didn't exactly go with this piece. Your last bar, i seriously did not like! but the rest was all pretty good.
thanks alot for that man!!! thanks for takin the time to break it down!! pz!!
My comments and ratings out of ten.
[Formula MC]-Good drop mainly self gloreification but still nicely done. good flow and good structure and most of all great attitude.you made your point load and clear that instant is gonna be around not to be fuked with 7/10
[Timeless]-Nice vocab and good flow got a bit scratchy but still hung in there nice wordplay but dunt try to force multies. good structure and nice work with useing your crew memebers names in a postive fashion 6/10
[Lethal]-good shit but i dunt like the ...............pauses there good but there just basically showing u cant think of words for the next line u can make a much betta drop by puttin in words and makin multies that way. still good drop . 7/10
[Lost]-u started off weak and slow but eventually u upped the tempo using good vocab near the end but u should of had more in the first part still nice flow and good punches.7/10
[LM]-pretty weak u didnt talk bout the crew much u more leaned to talk bout yourself and how uve improved not on how u think ya crew is besides the first few lines but should of made it longer but still aight 5/10
[Wogzta]-nice flow and good puches writers block<->blood clots works and chilli kebab punch was good working with ur name and but u didnt once use the name INSTANT in your drop would of helped and should of made it longer 6/10.
[The Judge]-nice drop i think urs was my favourite out of everyones good punches and positive personals and strong words u didnt just sling curses but u backed them up with wit. good structure and shorter pauses then lethals overall dope.9/10
overall score for the whole thread - 8.5/10 nice collab hope to see more in da future
don't ever post anything like this ever again.
*continues throwing up*
^^^^ wat are you talking bout this was good explain urself then.