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alright this battle was below average....
undead- you had a really weak opener and a bad closer...you had some average shit so thats why im givin you the vote
shorty-your shit was weak as hell...i dont know what the fuck to tell you but go get some help from somebody and learn the fuck how to battle man...but i mean atleast you tryin but you really gotta elevate your shit
vote-undead/black
but yeah put up an honest vote for the shit in my sig and this one...i will return an honest vote on your battle....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...41#post1235441
this was a stupid battle but if i could vote id probably vote Blackgrenade/Undead!
lets review
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v/Black Grenade
u didnt even vote man u need 100 posts before ur vote can count and u have to vote up the top not just say it.
Weak battle, but...
shortY: You can come a lot stronger. Your verse was basically not creative and was really weak. You had punches, but they didn't grab me. ASame old, same old, but even lower than before. Keep elevatin'.
UNDEAD: You can come a lot stronger, too. Your's wasn't creative either, but it was slightly better than shortY's verse. I wasn't feelin' the punches or personals. Decent wordplay. Keep elevatin'.
Vote: UNDEAD
*Why did you put your alias in the voting poll, UNDEAD? Anyway, keep elevatin'.*
Vote on my battles ya'll. I'll return the favor.
god that was my old name then i changed to undead i use to be blackgrenade so please drop ya vot on the poll
I see. Good luck in ur battle.
Blackgrenade what the fuck man u just gotta change your name!
im sick a people like u acting black its just getting kinda lame
^^lame is.... how can i put it... lame
After you hear the rest of this u might want my picture in a frame
and wanna ask me questions bout how i got your mother so tame
^^keep mom jokes on the schoolyard... attack him personally
What the hell dawg what u meen u want a fight?
you still get your mum to tuck u in and check u got your nite light
^^not really a punch
Come on u little bitch u still belive in saint nick
u always write him letters wishing 4 a strap on dick
give you-a-kick, killa-u-quick
just the thought of u is making me-a-sick
^^just the thought of these for lines is making me sick
u think your rap is dope and think u can internally bruize me
just you wait till im 18 when i get my-self an U Z I
^^terrible closer... you practically dissed yourself
^^^weak flow... played lines... no punches let alone personals... minor points for some multis...
wat the fuk u say you hate people acting black
well hell i am black u got a problem wif dat
^^meh could have been much better
why dont u tell my black ass while you give it a kiss
but i bet your lips really smell like piss
^^wtf?! not a good punch at all... not sure if it even punches
why dont u stop by the hospital and say hello to my son
and your brother thats right i fuked your mother
^^umm... the rhyme was 'mom'
she gave up fightin back real quick
but i think she wanted a big black dick
^^filler...
your name is your height and people get frights
cause your a bulimic midget wearing tights
i bet u spend alot of lonely nights
i ate your mummaz pussy with some rice
^^fuck this terrible random bull...you need to setup and ... punch kid punch...
god damn bitch she was so nice
and only cost $200 for the night
you say your gonna get a UZI wen ya 18
well wen im 18 i'll get a BlackGrenade
and u blast you so bad you wont be saved by 1st aid!
^^your closer was as bad as his... worse considering you fed off his verse...
^^^pretty much the same notes as the first.. complexity, structure vocab... you get minor points for slightly better punches...
Both of these were weak verses... you should keep workin and read some other battles ...
vote = undead
plz return the favour with an honest vote on the link in sig