Lost Souls...Back Again [[!!TRYOUT!!]]

3rd paragraph was dope the first paragraph cud use better worldplay and vocab, and the middle was jus filler , overall 7/10 cuz u wasted a entire verse , and if u were up against a vet wit that verse u would have been merked

iight thanks homie , yo i just came from spanish harlem n i droped it like in 15 min.....thx for the feed back homie... !!!

first verse on the battle was ok , but u should come out with lines that grab a readers attention , u need stronger opening punches
the second verse was all filler and bullshit and it was a waste of lines
the third verse was by far ur best verse in that battle , u had a good closure and the punches connected
overall this was an average verse but u took the battle , the only problem was that u wasted a entire verse that was a shit load of chances to merk ur opponent that u threw away . i would give u a 7/10 only cuz u chucked that verse away, i think u won the battle tho

yo waddup a long ass time fam...a VERY LONG ASS TIME!....

fam
dark inspiration and southside mafia are dead homie and they have lil respect on this site
and yea this crew is gonna rise and never hit a peak , nigga we jus shot up from the motha fuckin grave

wordness.

yo Doe, jus stay wit this crew cuz all the otherones u in basicly died out...LS is on the rize..non stop till thers a forum

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yea we here we need a forum tho

the movement is supposed to get a forum soon so im staying in that crew, they already hollad at a mod, but this crew is dope, and the only way to get a forum is to battle a crew with a forum

i think we should battle MONDO THUGS they have a roster that we can take down , and when we get a forum try to be active cuz the other crews are never active ,

iight we have to change this roster , with the most respect to the crew, first off the leader of the crew needs 2000 post and 2 co-leaders need 1000 post , so figure it out

iight ill talk to shells about it

iight homie and im gonna start gettin my post up and doin it fast

i need to do the same

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u need to get over 1900 post homie before we can get a crew and shellz needs to get to 2000 post as well , also put me as co-leader , if its down wit yall , i had 1600 post but a mod got pissed off and took 1000 post away

whats good?