Elevation Thread.

good story tellin' rap i like your style, through the whole rap i had imagery of what you was talkin about..........i like the way you took that topic thats good shit


layin on the floor schemin' lil nervous and scared,
whose at the door's a mistery, betta be prepared,
'tick tock' the clock face, got a gun on my waist,
let that door open wrong im'a blast this place,
footsteps the woods knocking makin noise on the floor
'knock, knock' real politely then they opened the door
almost popped the glock, look of shock on my face
my mom's opened up the door, said clean up this place!
get your ass off the floor, i aint gon' tell you again
put your water pistol away and get your ass into bed!


^^^corny but i figured id make it a stupid ending.........but thats why they call this the elevation thread right?

Next Topic: Relationships (to anything not necessarily opposite sex)

yo it was iight but like u said the endin wuz kinda loopty

tryna relate to this chick i been tryna go dating with
but she keep sayin shit to make me wanna spray this clip
first she talkin bout marriage now she tlakin bout kids
only thing im worried bout is that ass and them tits
to get drunk one night and wake up sayin that wuz the best
then the police bust in and say stop that incest
i look over and see my mom and im thinkin how could i son
but i think going to montana wuz wut i shoulda done

n/t= dead in the snow

the coldest winter of 95, ice every where hangin on phone lines,
afghan spreads past around in the house, im claImin it's mines/
power outage in every county, damn no electricity,
a stove is all we got to keep us warm, at the ave of NorthCity/
we all snugged up to go outside and fool around,
while peeps tryin to go in to town/
they should have came prepared like we did and shyt ,
but then we saw em slippin and sliddin in ditch/
while we were buildin snow men, there was something in the woods up against a tree it was a shoe sole,
as we got closer in shock , we saw a Dead Man In The Snow/

Williamsburg, VA 1995, Christmas Eve (True STory )

Next Topic / Mass Appeal

((That was alright nothing astounding but I like that you were able to make a story flow always a good sign. The rhymes made it feel kind of akward at parts))

You sitting there talking bout how you icy cold/
Its like Jack Frost gots you in a choke hold/

I got flames to melt ice and drown you/
If you knew you were about to die, what would you do?

I saw you down there sucking water into your lungs/
Sound like you an asian like William Hung/
Dont want no more of your lip so I rip out your tounge/

Telling your story so people feel bad a little bit/
Next time I'll get you a camel so you can learn how to spit/

N/t= What to do when your in a fight and your realize you just misfired yourlast bullet

-feeling the flow. had a real nice and clean punches. every punch was consistant which is good.- (not an expert of the topic considering i ain't a gang banger)

last bullet, damn ain't got anymore clips
but i aint gonna get laid out, so my fist turn into bricks

i throw crazy punches
moving like the matrix in hyper speed, but in my quick eyes, they just lunges

BAM, knock em out, thats what he gets messing with real G's
frisk em and take his keys - then stomp until he bleeds

run for the Cali low rider
split this bitch, soul and body, then divide her

-Practicing

N/t = How to escape from police cars chasing you.

- u could work on yo srycture and your flow, the wordplay wsa good.

I gotta be swerving in between tha lanes
Tryin to run from tha 5-0 for shootin some lames
pull a hard right watch tha cop car crash
straight getaway nigga cause im too fast
gotta roadblock ahead of me a alley on tha left
this has gotta be tha craziest day i've had yet

n/t having sex for tha 1st time

ayo that was solid i like the words n shit but try to make ur lines longer cause the flow seemed choppy

ayo...

the first time i did it, i was nervous as fuck
i could tell in my girls eyes she always wanted to get stuck
when she was suckin the dick, she was lickin like a trained horse
all i wanted was to fuck the appetizers, move right in to the main course
When I slid in, i was like who the fuck is the king now
I could feel in my veins was the ceilings I would bring down
as soon as i was done, i pulled out with a big grin
then looked at that ass and knew that I got a big win

n/t-jackin a tv from a store

it was good, ordinary flow. Had fair imagery. Dope bars.

run into the spot black hood, black mask, and black gloves
and got the getaway car sitting on DUBs / /
i see that brand new Sampson
pop the asian motherfucka in the leg and hold him for ransom //
jack the video tape
wait - tag the spot with my signature paint - and then hop the gate / /
take the TV and load in the car
last thing on my mind is getting captive behind a bar //

my bad, forgot to leave topic
n/t = Doing a live rap battle for the first time.

- good multi's , good structure.

sweatin like hell hear my name/
errbody booing thinkin im lame
I get intro'ed and grab tha mike
they callin me tha champ by tha end of tha night

n/t doin a drive-by

not really feelin it..

im about to roll on this fool as if im the don,
but first drivin closer to make sure he's the ones,
me and my boyz lock and load,oh there he goes,
pull down my window and tell the driver to go slow,
he turns and looks sees me with my nines,
automaticly thinks oh shit imma bout to die,
so i pull the trigga before he starts to weap,
drives off wile his girls screamin sayin wake up u jus asleep,

n/t the meaning of hip hop

good imagery, but the rhymes were pretty basic - work on vocab, use some multies. decent though - cool ending

hiphop is life, rap is the language
a way to express hunger, exposed to the famine
culture cultivated by years of oppression
go guessin' about life and where you be headin
a dog-eat-dog mentality, constantly squandering, brawling to elevate
some are never great - others launch to the top and celibrate
but they walk a tightrope and try not to fall off
if yall raw from the streets than keep it at least
if you rapped about poverty back then, than stay the same beast
don't sell out to record execs - realize you're better than that
why not stay for 15 minutes as opposed to just five?
that's how you can keep our culture alive

next topic - recording a demo

-Yo flow was off in the first couple of bars and yo structure could be better but errthing else is cool

In the booth for 6 hours gettin my shyt down
Couple of days my mixtape gon be in town./
Pourin my heart and soul str8 in to tha mic
dam might be here for the rest of the night./
Finish the demo blown and hungry as hell
aint got nothuin "lets do another one" shit might as well./
2 hours later go to mickey D's
in tha morn, on tha block tryin to sell my cds
n/t drug dealin

this faggot wanted to know about drug dealin so he knows whats what,
so he can go arund sayin he needs drugs but really he wants cock,
pussy mutherfucker shut your mouth unless you got somethin else to say,
havin a fat man wearin a pink shower cap in your sig is kinda gay,
but thats what i expect from a dick ridin faggot,
u want an award for being gay? ask elton john he'l say here u can have it,
im done so don't even try to reply,
cuz i'll have to come back to beat but im not tht typer guy,

N/T having a new born child

shit, my baby mama gonna have a new child
she the one pushing, but my minds going wild
having a kid this young? damn, that aint my style
just glad that that bitch i fucked wasnt a pedophile
aint even got a house, and expect me to rock the crib
damn, this baby gonna have to eat like me, without a bib (eating dirty)
gotta get a job, and put in more work?
abortion? no, hit the block, find some niggas that wanna get murked

t/p = Dreaming about being a rapper