Elevation Thread.

that shit was nice u got a nice ability to make ya shit ryme and flow keep it up!!!

yo, this cat is garbage, u remind me to take out the trash
ya lyrics aint make me fear shit they makin me laugh
you cant ryme cuz ya punchlines never land right like a plane crash
better come correct ot the tech can leave you left with half of ya neck
u wanna be flashy til them things blast,
leave ya brains on ya video games
now thats what i call a dream cast
leave ya blood on the window
and ya widow thought it was stained glass
nigga im gutter like a alley in N Y
so before you heard 3 6
ROX always been fly

aiight why can't fuckaz like this ROX bitch stick to tha rules of tha cypher...didn't go off topic, didn't leave one....

So I'ma make and leave a t0pic...

[U]T0pic I'ma rap bout: Why fuckaz can't understand cypher rules


Aiyo man get ya shit straight if you want to elevate
Cause right now this rappin isn't matchin fate
You got some hell to escape
If your not sure of tha rules then go to page one and memorize
Then come back and let me know you understand us guys
You fuckas piss me off ROX, cause I should be able to come in and give positive feedback
Tha only thing positive I can give is you be wack
So be back and be abt to bat wit these raps
Cause right now your rhyme game is shit
If I was you I'de get rid of it

t0pic: base jumping

that shit was good man, i feel you with niggas not following rules too
ROX

when the base jumping i can hear the shit beating in my brain
with my hot as lyrics on it heating up the flames
driving through yo neighborhood waking up little infants
copping cadillacs just to throw a system in it
im a fucking menace
but society loves when i cruise by
keep da bass jumping, not on loud but too high

n/t da carter 2

i dont know what you mean by the topic...

so ill just write a rhyme.


man im just so ill, theres no stoppin me
i just pass go and collect, like monolopy
just got to be the dopest around here
fortellin your furture, if the crystals clear
damn im near the edge, dare me to jump
or would you push me off like a bitch punk

nt... carrot cake

that's a nice verse...but homes...that ain't the topic

my mama make the best carrot cake in the world,
when i was about 12 years old i be givin some to my girl,
i had no shame, don't care what they say cause the carrot cake was that good,
people thought i was crazy but when they tasted it, i was misunderstood,
not too soft not too sweet but it was just right for anyone to eat,
when it was baked, my baby cousin stopped cryin after eatin that carrot cake,
as time goes by, mama gets weaker and weaker thats why I'm learnin to bake
i use em to gamble though i know mama's famous recipe's at stake,


N/T - Alabama

that was nice..good job of staying on topic..keep it up homie.


my skills are so ill theyd make the healthyest man drop dead
I stay on point like a drill..still i've said everything uve not said
i say this standing tall n stout if u got gold or platnium it better be n ya mouth
just a reminder that we live below the north where "birds fly south"
homie above me is from Adamsville.. n comes wit some of the baddest skills
hes the real Mcoy.i gotta homeboy that attends the university of Troy
check out this useage of gramma..Id hate to be stuck in the slamma..but juss know i got mad respect for ALA-BAMA

kinda of short cuz i dont know to much about Alabama..but i did my best..

n/t life without ne technology

life without technology would be horrible, check it
we'd hit someone with sticks if we were disrespected
no spinning rims to brag about or cars to drive
no speed limits, no 40's, no .45's
no chains to be off of, no diamond rings
no tv, no books, no mindless things
no toilets, no paper, living in crap
but the worst thing of all - there wouldn't be rap

next topic: fireworks

I was feelin ya verse meng, nice flow and rhymes you had in their...I feel tha last line as well, good job...one!


Tha sky gets lit up like tha northern lights
Everytime fireworks get set into flight
Tha l0ud, bright type are tha ones I like
Watch em' take off after your match strikes
Put tha flame to tha wick and back up from that bitch
Cause its launchin staright towards orbit
At tha house I like off fire crackers and bottle rockets
You see sparks cause you put ya mic wire in tha phone socket
Fireworks are for celebration like on tha fourth of July
Like multiple fuckin rainbows take over tha sky


topic: Water Tubing

good imagery, nice flow man, especially the multiple rainbows thing

waiting so long in the line, this better be worth it
oh shit, my tube when down too fast, perfect
ah, fuck it, i might as well go, no reason to stop
so i jumped into the water with a pleasing kaplop
but now the lifeguard be telling me to get off of the slide?
fuck that you dumbass, i paid for this ride
i push off and instantly feel the pull of the current
the slide rubs against my skin, but it ain't a deterrent
my joints are hurting at the end, but i fly out the furthest
now i know why all the other people were so fuckin nervous
it was on purpose - they led us into the slaughter
the pool at the end was being drained of its water!

next topic: ninjas

Sighs, numbchucks, and Ninja stars
Attackin in tha night, no one knows where you are
Move on foot, too much noise wit cars
Smack up bitches real bad, like when I spit bars
Snap necks, cut through vests and snatch tec's
Don't need no guns these dudes moves be tha best
Crackin spines wit a kick to tha back
Move in groups or solo like I do on a track
Live by a code, honestly, loyalty, and brotherhood
If you don't follow tha rules you get hit, and thats understood
They'll put you under wood, and eight feet underground
Spin ya head round by punchin ya chin
You can't beat a Ninja, its impossible for you to win

topic: Hindu's

hey, you didn't leave a response to mine :(

my bad bro...shit was on topic and nice wit it

I liked this line alot, funny shit and good imagery and use of words

"ah, fuck it, i might as well go, no reason to stop
so i jumped into the water with a pleasing kaplop
but now the lifeguard be telling me to get off of the slide?
fuck that you dumbass, i paid for this ride"

my bad it was coo, holla

Sighs, numbchucks, and Ninja stars
Attackin in tha night, no one knows where you are
~decent opener~
Move on foot, too much noise wit cars
Smack up bitches real bad, like when I spit bars
~too forced~
Snap necks, cut through vests and snatch tec's
Don't need no guns these dudes moves be tha best
~i liked this surprisingly~
Crackin spines wit a kick to tha back
Move in groups or solo like I do on a track
~this was just ridiculous~
Live by a code, honestly, loyalty, and brotherhood
If you don't follow tha rules you get hit, and thats understood
They'll put you under wood, and eight feet underground
Spin ya head round by punchin ya chin
You can't beat a Ninja, its impossible for you to win
~the rest of it was aight~

my personal opinion you ok but you need to elevate a bit maybe its how im reading it but most of your shit seems forced...


theres more of em than us...talking bout them Hindu...
everyone of em will die for thier god...do you have that love in you???
would you sacrifice everything you love...just for a belief...
loving the dirt that god gave you...loving the crust in your teeth...
they the most loyal faith...most of em follow rules...
most of us do what our friends do...most of us follow fools...
dont get me wrong...im a christian...thru and thru...
back in the day they had Crusades...nowadays they suing you...
cant believe that its come to this...finally whos faith is pure...
get rid of the lesser one...have the superior god create a cure....


nt... your babys moms

It was pretty good lacking rhyming words (but im not a good rapper so its better than the most of the shit i do)


yo my babys moms always asking for money
they still call me their honey
but its just a show cuz when i say no they get all pissed
one of em even shot at me but missed
now shes spending 15 years
and her lil boy at home, eyes all full of tears
i try to be a good dad but they just sad
cuz their moms locked away
my little girls mom is always poppin pills
I try to tell her that shit kills.
But she dont care, she just wants her fix
its really sad to see a little girl get in the mix.
So innocent so young.
The phone rings she just got shot in the lung
The docs say she wont make it
how am i gonna break this news to her daughter?

nt: running from the police

that was pretty good but work on your structure.try to make it where each bar is close in lenght..n ya vocab try to up it..but u stayed on topic..juss pratice youll get better