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word my dude thanks again man....one more tog o and you have really helped me out my dude!

to be str8 up i wasnt feelin it til the second paragraph.

but then it warmed up for the finish which was great.

The past that holds my treasures in life
Now sleeps with the titanic in the cold and weary night.
^nice line, gave good image and had good meaning


"the truth only hurts when let to intrude in a meaningless sense of rudenss in life"
^this shit was tight too


good poetry piece here.

This was nice, very well written if I do say so myself. I liked it. There were a few places that could have been worded differently like...
Like a song constantly playing of thoughts to rewind.
continueing to play countless times
^^it's like you were repeating yourself, and it really wasn't neccessary. you had good rythm and your lines flowed nicely in most places, and the vocab was on point as well. you could do with a bit of multis but the metas in here were crazy so they made up.

All in all a good drop. Keep writing.

This was a pretty lengthly piece, but reading it was worth it. I like the imagery it had and the concept of it. It flowed well and the structure was decent. Overall, I give this piece a B-plus

thanks guy's i appreciate the feed!.

Very well written. Emotion and vocab showed alot throughout this piece....I liked it overall...not much critique to give because it was overall a nice piece. get at me for collab sometime

i will do old man.....