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ill give some strong advice for both of you,...ELEVATE.
if your not gonna leave proper feed than dnt post
yo good rhymes man but to emotional
This peice was really nice...i was feelin the topic....nice flow from both of you...rhymes were excellent....strucutre was nice....this was a really nice read..
my fav. lines from laydee's verse were
^ i really liked these lines..flowed great..nice rhymes and i felt it...Quote:
Thee only way i can ever express my feelins is thru pen n paper
I don’t choose who i fall for but Compared 2 other men u greater
U gimme butterflies, watchin u right now gives me pain But pleasure
Individual gutter guy, fa real have i gone insane..? But i treasure...
Every moment lookin at u as i kno we will never make it as “One”
& yeah facing tha truth is tha hardest.. atleast i don’t fake it like some
my fav lines from D's verse were
^ these lines were nice....liked the imagery and rhymesQuote:
another man by your side blocking my attemps
undressin u wit my eyes, wantin ur sexy body i must admit
the girl of my dreams 10ft away from me
tryin to get ur attention why wnt u notice me
ur long brown hair compliments ur face
loving ur caramel complexion,can i have a taste
nicely flowed
soo overall this peice was pretty dope...
both of you keep droppin youz got sum real good skillz
thanks plain that was prolly the best feed we got beside verbal
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Laydeee- very creative in the peice,nice use of vocab and structure made it easier to read,u had good imagery and it made it good cause it kept me readin...my favorite lines was....
A year has gone by now, i’m wit a man & ur memories ent faded
Bway i picture U wen i’m wit him, Not a single moment shaded
& it can’t ever be raded, ‘fore u are never degraded,
even though “we” never made it, ur stil in my heart only a change 2 it
i was really feelin that right there
Dastreetson-verse was decent, only thing it lacked alot of is Vocab...structure,imagery,and flow was all on point...evelate in vocab
my favorite lines was at the beginning......
do you believe in love at first sight,i do im seeing it right now
watching you from a distance, want to talk to u but how
theres another man by your side blocking my attemps
undressin u wit my eyes, wantin ur sexy body i must admit
felt like u was gettin a point across in them lines....Good job to both
thanks JQ uppin