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Alright. I'm likin the flow and your approach on the Topic. Could've been better and more creative but this will do. You had imagery in your verse which was good but next time add some metaphors or something, similies, wordplays. Your piece was very Complex. You didn't have any emotion cause this wasn't a emotional Topic It seem like it was a messsage. This was good none the less..Keep writing.
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about time lol
Topic- It was good.
Approach- Was dope. Did a good job of staying on topic and engaging the reader.
Structure and Flow- Good. It fell off a few times, but it's cool. Flow was good.
Word play, Multies ect- Didn't really see any. But it was still dope.
Overall- You did good. I liked it. Only a few problems with structure.
Keep dropping.
weak shit...........u just saying what ever ryhmen togherer
where the fuck did you come from?
just cuz i voted against you fag