Elevation Thread.

iight yo that was good shit..ya shit flowed really good together..keep it up homie



this no weight is better then lyrical/
his flow'll leave u hysterical/
im more then spirtual/
i see ya lips moving but im not hearin u/
come test tha great/
u need to do more then elevate/
fuck miss Cleo I can tell ya fate/
look at all ya loss i can tell ya weight/
tha crown ima win this/
if u think u better then me check ya image/
im about to finish/
but not before tha competition is diminished...(JOOK$)


next topic:pick pocket

i pickpockets,to spit rockets,to shit phoenix,spit the meanist,
im back on da cypher, where i will rite her,
the gurl up above me, u can not shove me,
im back and im ready my flows straight and steady,
come get it then ull regret it u said it

ill leave a next topic since noob didnt ^^^
n/t Angel Dust

u might pickpocket/
but i spit hottest/
i dont gotta steal see tha ice i bought it/
its tha medalion of tha year/
my shits so colorful its like i got flowers in my ear/
im in here to expand my vocab/
I sell that sticky in to-go bags/
get that dough before u demand more slabs/
cuz u come short ya man'll get more stabs/
then scream 1,2,and 3/
who raps as hot as him u and me/
look at tha whip tha rims blue u see/
its summer time but theres still no one as cool as me....(JOOK$)

topic.... peepz fuckin up da cyph

I look up in the sky, the reflection of the sun shines off my eyes/
anotha day on the grind, be out till the moon come out or the spot gets dry//
another day in the life, had to switch my shit up cause i was scrapin bottom/
enemy of the state right, cops lookin at me like im fuckin ausama bin laden//
attitude so fuckin rotten, thought I had nuthin to live for except the dough/
like busta said gimme some mo, more problems not only the cops but sheisty kids kept robbin//
I had to look over both shoulders, kept my burner by my dick so i could keep my shit safe in a pinch/
never flinched kept movin, till i was in the club and got stabbed in the neck..........shit!

how hard is it to understand , a topic someone has given, or diss the person above you.... if u want to post some shit that you think is good go start a new thread ... dont fuck someone elses threads up liek that

Topic: stop freeposting noobs

these niggas need to stop before the shotgun spits
and im not refferring to the rhymes that these noobs are not gonna kick
freepoasting or free loading its possibly either
because theyre probably biting the shit cuase theyre probably readers
i was one once and probably still am considered by some
but i never liked free posting or administered one
these new niggas like to drift off topics
and it gets messy like when you shit off target

next topic: gettin high with your father

[B]you got some nice lyrics. you should work on keeping your lines about the same lenth or around the same number of syllables. good work with a hard topic. the shit off target line was hot.

i walked into the crib, to a house full of smoke/
saw my dad wit a blunt, and a few rocks of coke/
i said wutchu doin man, i thought u saw yo P.O./
he said "i went but it dont hurt if he dont know"/
i walked in, sat down and said "cmon then lemme hit too"/
then he said "this is what i was smokin when i made you/

damn that topic was more diff. then i expected.

next topic: your girl tells you she wants to turn gay

nice flow man, it brought the concepts to lyric and had good rhymes. keep it up homie.

i was writin this while you posted so whoever continues the cypher go with his topic, above.......


oh shit, grab the stash i think your dads back,
hes got some pizza some acid and some snack packs,
"Hey kids lets drop cid and smoke a blunt, roll it up with
hashhish- oil and spark it up"
i did just that, the shit knocked the kids' pops out,
look in the top shelf for medicine to help with his health,
but first i'm eatin pizza, a stoned homie knows it enough
that he'll see the old geezer, return from comatosis
i'll fuckin coax him, grab acid and staple it under his nose tip,
oh no he's gonna die hes just too stoned, he woke up with his throat cut from tokes of the dope smoke puffs,
the room was spinnin for him and he seen a demon,
legions of teams of beavers were collonizing the TV reciever,
thats when i left and i never heard of the outcome,
of what becomes of the drunk bum dad of a chump in the slums

nice pro', it was easy to follow n i liked how u strung da vocab in smoothly...

peep da freestyle, edited with quotation marks 4 better understanding...


As my girl turns to me i can already tell wut shes gonna say
so she opens her mouth and says "baby i think im turnin gay"
well what a way to spoil the day i thought i was gettin some pussy, hip hop hurray
so i stay silent n its quiet except for outside we hear the cop sirens
"say somethin" she says, but im lost for words
wutever happened to the bees, now its just the birds n the birds?
"what does a girl got that i cant give u?"
"well for one thing, the size of ur dingaling is not the main issue"
"phew! then why the sudden change of sex preference?"
"well u see baby its all bcuz of ur 'FUCKING' NEGLENCE!"

NT: Written or Free'?

Sorry Poetic Jusdiss but I gotta diss you I was feeling some of your lines but
when i seen that hip hop hooray shit i just had to do it. so sorry here it goes

Who nicer than windy yo i like to meet him/
looked in the mirror finally seen him/ politely greet him/
Battle anybody and i'll likely beat em/
yo girl turned gay cuz we was having a threesome/
called her bestfriend said she with a fine ass nigga/
he got a half ounce n a gallon of liquor/
we all smoked out n the drank comes to end/
now its time to let the sucking fucking begin/
gotta bag up twice never hit it raw/
she had the time of life like she did it before/
her friend on the floor butt naked passed out/
your girl do me a favor take me to my man's house/

Next Topic: If you had a twin would you try to sleep with his girl w/out him knowing or her

Alright not really hard punches here more like ... I fucked ur girl cuz I'm a gangsta you wanna come more creative than that ... it takes some practice but you have potential you more then likely freestyle a bit or at least you write like you could have some experience in that area .. I don't really like ur topic .. so no hate but I gotta diss ..

This kids faking the flavor .. like flavored condoms he's slick ..
and close your eyes for now or later but your still sucking dick..
This kids hoping for a wish... like tom Hanks he's thinking big..
cuz I'll jump off a bridge if hip hop's futures REALLY in your sig ..
I can tell that you gutter .. but that don't mean that your nice ..
Hip Hop Ain't for every brother you were meant for sacrifice ..
J money thinks he's nice but I never felt the album ..
and If captian save a hoe then plz somebody help him ..
I swear to god study your literature and all your what haves..
cuz chicago ain't been poppin since the golden age of jazz..



Topic - Fake your best gangsta .. or diss me

i liked ur punches and i like ur style of rhyme
i aint no gangsta so why fake it...im just a emcee...ima diss

underrated u think u a true emcee but i could see thru ya
i figured u out quicker than i do psychological peliculas
seepin draws from a bitch i leave u like a creampie
i peeped ur flaws, u spit ur rhymes they fertile u just come dry
my lyrical missiles aimed n homin' i wouldnt need a miracle
to hit with this spherical device that'll bring u to ur peril
dare to step to me i paralyze from the waist down
get a grip, i load a clip into my mind n not a nine degrade clowns
founding father of freestyle forever i shoulda been
cuz this niggas overrated n IM under- just take a look at him

NT: make a definition of this word by rhymin'- Violentalist

forgot to post what i liked about ^^^..

i figured u out quicker than i do psychological peliculas,
that lind had nice vocab in it.

my lyrical missiles aimed n homin' i wouldnt need a miracle
that one kind of through off that flow alittle bit. it kinda stuk out cause it was the 5th bar.

over all the shit was tight for a freestyle. but it can always get better. in not the one to critisize cause im no 2 pac or jay-z.

ok i got to rhyme Violentalist, this aint a diss but learn how to spell its Violentlist,
envy this cause the definition of this petty word is,
shit i dont really know been smoking to much canabis,
wish it would come to thought but right now its emptyness,
fuck it ima take a guesse could it mean i got a violent-list,
of people to split throw the metal spiraling quick,
or could it be a instrmental operator in the opra or that one naz hit,
pause quick oh shit wait a min, i got the definition but ima spit scenarios playin with it,
this is like street brawls where body have to be hauld,
like the aftermath of a jump of a cliff free fall,
no parashoot is the only flaw to your plans outcome overall,
i spit this quick nigga 6 1/2 bars,
cause im trying to elevate in every aspct win lose or draw.

next topic.. try to rhymes the alphabet like
Answer to now one hold my own gun,
Bitch aprouched me so i gave her some more cum.

and keep it goning.

i wasnt really feelin the rhymes it was kinda weak mostly cuz it was a hard read n the rhymes were off a couple syllables but i was feelin how you tried to use the wordplay



the streets are war i deserve my stripes like a Zebra
i stay to let my dough rise like Yeast
see me with a gun my bitch swing the sword like Xena
play n ill let my hoe slice, make your whole fam Weep
i would do it myself but when i stick its somethin Vaginal
plus ya'll put yourself on a pedastool in reality your Unadmirable
im the guy most hate cuz im so damn Tenacious
try takin mine the flow gone leave you Sedated
that goes for anyone, i might get banned for puttin the forum in a Recession
or maybe cuz i lash out without warnin cuz im not one for the Questions
forget a judge when i battle cover the scene with Police
cuz when i shut my eyes with a silver mic to my lips im Obscene
im a green lanter an evil genius bout to do with rap what hitler did with Nati's
im heated easily dont make me snap like the paparazzi leave you in a still frame for Mommy
if my pace is to fast for yours i cant slow you need to sip some Lean
so watch yourself, i know what your doin before you cuz my sense is Keen
im negatively positive only death can give me the Jitters
its only gonna get better or worse so prove to me your Iller
cuz the time it takes for your softness to Harden
is the same amount of time it takes for them to find your body in the Garden
and dont make the mistake of invitin your friends to war cuz no fire is Friendly
thats why you'll catch me with neutrals or dolo cuz if its dark im comfortable firing til Empty
or i can do it in silence like i was walkin with a cloak n Dagger
im what you would call a genius with a punch n lines like Casius(clay)
he asked for somethin n gave it plus i wrote it Backwards
therefor im a threat to the best and the want me Abolished

Next topic- goin legit

Eh.. it was alright. that first few lines were wierd, but I got the point...
the vocab was pretty good but I feel like a lot of it was forced...
I can see you've got potential...keep workin' on it...

I'm goin' legit, gettin' it quick, cuz i'm all about my paper
came in the game swingin wild and hard like haymakers
I been in the studio all week tryna record tracks
I even got one over the beat of Styles P's "I'm Black"
This A&R he straight approached and offered me a deal
It was around lunch so he took me out to get a meal
I was like is this for real, you can't imagine how I feel
I almost signed the contract but before it was sealed
I had my lawyer look at it to make sure it was real
It was clear to me my obligation so i kept it tight
Took the pen outta my pocket and then proceeded to write
In spite of my happiness my joy it turned to pain
Cuz now I'm singed to a record label owned by none other...
...than the game...AWWW MAYNE...

Next topic- gettin some ass in ur grandmas house...while shes home

ur flow was wack.u need to elevate.im not hatin.serioulsly ELAVATE..

*MY BAD I WROTE ON THE WRONG TOPIC I WROTE ON THE LAST ONE FROM THE FIRST PAGE* THE TOPIC WAS ur gurl for 5 years just had a baby and ur the daddy

flirtin wit a chick for the past 2 years,she say my game tight
she workin wit the dick,cum passed through her ears,got the call that same night
bitch from 5 yearz ago,yellin,she excited
yo was goin on,she tellin,rather reciting
she sayin my baby here,she like dude u tha pops
i came to her house,went smoothe through the locks(she didnt hear me come in)
see her wit another niga,like damn,f.uckin b*itch
she ran like f*uck the shit,her man up n shit
he talkin to me like im stupid,like im a 4 year old
so i walk up to him,but there before he holds,
my newborn baby,like get ur hands of my son, niga i will kill ya
guess this niga understands that this my new la familia(family in spanish)

:givesaf: :2thumb:

n/t u robed a store and ur niga snitched

it was tight considering your 12, you gone elevate regardless but it just takes time, try to make your flow more complex. like the way you explain the situation seems alittle simple, work on cleaverness.

got the hoodie got the mask got gloves got the gat,
load the slugs lock it back get in quick leaven fast,
first thing we gotta do is bust the camera for the proof,
and if the worker feelen brave bust one up in his tooth,
grabs some chips OE's, blunts, and condoms on the way out,
car pulled up, skeeted back on the way to the house,
but then my nigga started talken scared like "what if the cops find out"??,
i said "no one will know, cause if you snitch ill blow your mind out",
so a week went by things on the streets started heating up,
cherikee's and black explorers was spotted but they aint seeing us,
next thing you know im getten ropped off put in cuffs,
i lost four dime bags but im glad i left the strap in the cut,
so now they got me in this room tryen to get me to confess,
but its kewl cause without my lawer they aint gettin a breath,
got off the chain from lack of evidence, word came up there snitchen among my resisdense,
when i find out who it is im going strapped like im hunting elephants,
found out it was the back stabbin phoney friend,
that i thought i could depend but all that shit has come to an end,
you fucked up cause i know where you sleep in your den,
i had him waken up to nightmars like freddy cougers revenge.

n/t- let me see your skills with musing multies, spit as many as you can in a rhyme.

First..... the topic was stupid... so that showed in the piece.... second by looking at your piece and looking at the topic u gave I think your confused on what multies are.... theres a link in my sig I think u need to check out...... but overall its was bland... just going through the story ....with a few played metas.... it was jus blah...

Now......... your topic Sux kid.... throwing in as many rhymez as u can in a piece looks/sounds retarded... it doesnt show skill .... it shows a lack of taste..... and destroys the flow of a piece.... blah. Shit that aint even a fucking topic... its a challenge....blah

So sick of the ignorance spewing outta mindless mouths
I profoundly doubt these faggots know what multi-syllable rhymes about
Refined and stout their stupidity stacks high inclined in doubt
hidden behind the grout, they tile wordz unknown up front to hide the doubt
they blindly spout off wordz they have to google jus to find a meaning for
I wanna find and ream these whores til their spines and minds deceased and more
Its time to see that your.. not golden.. your shine defines no gleam to soar
rewind the time and see that your skilless & weak...kinda like a squeemish girl
blah............
blah blah blah............

topic.... The ignorance of someone using words that they dont know the meaning of

man cats these day sayin shit,half of it they dont know the meanin/
they cant find out wut they bein/
so they go on da net to find a dictionary/
man all these cats a gay ass faries/
if u gonna say somethin no the definition/
if no then say hello to my suspicion...


nt=goin somewhere where everybody wants to beef u

that topic was weak homie

aiyo gangsta that shit was wack
how you a G and you fraid to get shot in the back
lemme tell you sumthing, you aint shit, fuck around me ill empty my clip
ill spray you while you rideing on the whip kill you when you sit
you like cream i dip you in a cinniamon whip

That topic was weak, but you ain't even hit it up,
This kid needs a hot air balloon to get it up,
Don't try me, leave a subject the next time your rhyme,
I leave this kid puking with green in the face more than a line,
I crush fake emcees, and erode their courage,
I'll have "carnage" turning into "murkage"
Have you spinnin' and yellin "HeeHee!" like Mike Jackson,
And guarantee you get your money's worth with this action.

Topic: The World as it Spins

U fuckers need to start reviewing the kat before u and leave FEADBACK....MORONS.....

Exact.......blow.... alot of played lines.... alot of stupid lines... blah blah blah..... MICHEAL JACKSON LINES ARE PLAYED AS FUCK!!!!!!!!......... and why do u have carnage and murckage quoted.... it aint wordplay....WTF????.... its weak to quote wordplay... its even weaker to use quotes to quote random wordz.....blah

topic:the world as it spins
(wtf??? u couldnt come up wit something better....blah)

bubbles pop and bursts of air hit the inside of my stomach
tingling sensations tremble up and I try not to vomit
My eyez get flooded... and visionz blur trough my sockets
I try to hold my chest....clench my neck and just try to stop it
But I feel chunks of somethin flow upwards and out like rockets
now this ride called 'The World as it spins' is covered in Vomit
blah..blah...blah

topic....... Hardships

your flow is a bit choppy, but overall your stuff is ok.
I also like the topic
Hardships



Hot dogs, bologna, macaroni and cheese,
if yous lucky, this is what you ate on my streets,
puttin more sugar in the coolaid wasn't a easy feet
cause moms is havin trouble makin ends meet
Concrete is the jungle, it surrounds us all
at the age of 13 you start husltin small
within a couple years your gettin the raw
cut it up, make some money till your dynasty falls
just cause you couldn't afford to get those new clothes
Sitting in jail was inevitably the path you chose
mama's wipin tears from her eyes and snot from her nose
wishin you could come back and ease all her woes
if it is too good to be true it is
thats the main reason we need to teach the kids
about hardships and the right way to live
cause without education ignorance ain't Bliss

NT- describe witnessing a driveby shooting through your window

I think there was good content displayed, a fresh approach sorta was taken, although I think you need to add different rhymin techniques to keep people readin along because I got a bit bored... Overall pretty good though :D

A fuwkin gun went off, two guys have just hit the floor,
the fuwkin car sped off, the two guys move no more.
I cannot believe my eyes, i can hardly breath,
i try to move my thighs, but my chair i just cant leave.
sick feelings reach t'bottom of mi stomach, i have to hold in
the idea of what i had jus seen, was an unholy sin.
as stood up, i felt it, i'd just swallowed my pride....
i turned round, i saw it, I'D DONE A SHITE!! :(

LOOOOL

Next topic: Losing the remote control.

p.s don't be too harsh, it was a joke... i think what these boards need is a bit of humour (good or bad :P )

u had a good opener. and nice second sentecne
but ur middle was kind of weak.
ur really good for a newb tho, elevate


i lost the remote? whered it go now?
idk but hell, i aint leavin the couch
too lazy, nigga this shits unfair like hell
cuz the last time i changed manually...
.................was too long ago to tell
"honey! get yo ass here, change the tele"
"and where the fucks that food for my belly?"

blah..weak ass shit i spit! lol


TOPIC:Worlds Collide "heaven, hell"

aaahhh man the opener wasnt that good. nothin rely rhymed but at the end it started to pick up. u should have used bigger words but its all fun n games here so keep on elevatin.

those two words dont mix like ariforce and rap//
completely diffrent frazes like pissin and takin a crap//
when those two worlds meet i dont want to be around//
but if i am i take the devils side cuz im completly hell bound//
i know god will hit me with a lightning bolt from the sky//
but i bring all thunder to him untill the day that i die//
iv been cursed by the devil from the day of my birth//
i dont want to see that day,
so ill continue to keep peace on earth//

next:witch rappers u hate

Some of the rhymes seem forced. Mixin both topic and diss at beginning was good. Some of the flow seems a bit off, keep the same number of syllables per line.

BTW. I'm a much better teacher than student.

I dont know any "WITCH" rappers, but I would hate them all...
Although the rappers I hate are anyone who fakes being raw
Ja-Rule's a wack ass faggot, who thinks hes the shit...
He's probably a mommas boy, still suckin on her tits
And singers who try to rap, just plain fucking suck...
Like that herb Akon, sounds like hes missin a nut
Fuck all the homos, keep rap gangsta please...
No fucks with scrapes and bruises on they knees.

probably just contradicted myself...
next topic = sex on TV

The first two lines was okay but the rest was
really simple.Work on your vocab,
nut,fuck,shit,tit too simple......

sex on t.v

Nowdays they show anything on Television,
Not Caring is kids is Paying Attention..
I'm watching a Pg13 Movie my son was with Me,
All of a sudden thety showing ass and tities..
Kissing and Hugging Intimate Touching,,
so i coverd my child eyes so he would'nt see nothing...

Next Topic...........The End of tha World

yo ya rap was vivid.i could picture my mom doing that to me years ago..lol
but naw for real i like the way it flowed and it made sense keep it up homie..

we know the real champ is in here(ME LOL)
im sucking the blood outta this mc like a vamp was in here
ok mr detroit or should i say Eminem(ThaChampIsHere#1)
u tall and even Ethiopeans aint seen no one as thin as him
all we get is six lines
so on each one ima diss u six times
ur a loser i know u wish god could fix time
boost ya self up theres no need to try slacker
u a bug and my complexity swallows u up like a venus fly trapper.(JOOK$)

next topic: y do ppl rap when they know they have no skill

the Topic was a good idea, your rhyme lacked substance and complexity, the punch at the end was pretty weak, but you've got the right idea it just seems like you need to take your time with writting.



Why do people rap when they know they wack
everybody's a critic and they reply right back
and say your rhymes off track, so many times this crap,
blows my mind like crack, till i finally snap,
if you've shed some light and told someone their lines ain't tight,
they try and fight, instead of using lead to write,
and better the rhymes, we as competitors try
to help ourselves, until the letters run dry,
so if you’re, who this rhyme is about,
keep your opinion to yaself and shut ya f#ckin mouth

very nice flow.u rhymed ya shit well and it was on topic.keep it up homie..
u could have used bigger words though but its all good


y u flowin the same this cats not sloid hes liquid like creme
this is the game and ya rap carear was juss a dream
i juss gotta message that says IOU and that was from a fiend
my crew is multitalented
the flow i multibalanced it
dont ever come at me with that lame shit
i run the street governtment like William Renquist
my whole vibe is picture perfect u might wanna frame this
how u gonna think about runnin next to me
when i took your advice and made raps with more rhyme complexity..(JOOK$)

next topic/ what should we do about ppl that dont leave a topic

first off,your shit was tight,fairly simple but creative and on point,you got good punch lines,it could have some more complexity but it didnt lack complexity either,very solid rhyme scheme,keep elevatin and droppin.~1~


we should take em all and line em up
ask em questions like wheres your mind
can you rhyme or what,no buzzers
oops ya time is up,no recollection
of any of my questions
cant remember a simple message

that shit was tight man, if you spit again cool maybe... i'll leave you some ability stuff

i spit so complex it's a mathimatical equation
and you see a pic of pain in your imagination
patient nation listen and learn just wait for ya chance to burn
you leave a messeage then a topic got any questions
then i leave you wit 2 rendering suggestions
you need elavation or every battle you get in will me your devistation
if you ain't got skill make some then break some
afterwards take some..

lyrical master minds

i thought it was aight yo, vocab was pretty good but the rest was basic, u def can elevate

im a lyrical mastermind the kind to blind n turn def
with every step explode like mines time is lime when a celeb
stress the flow tho rappers know Po' dont show signs of slow
rhymes close to no mo' climbs we at the top shoot clap n drop
spill knowledge through verbal carnage cap ya dome n dont pay homage
i make collages of skin abolished n burned takin turns blowin up solids
make enemies to mush n shreds of pieces n wrap their carcas around me like old navy fleeces
as a L double M i bring trouble in n have others runnin on the double
n make the most powerful respect me, make the most ruthless wanna cuddle

NT: Shakedown

thats was pretty good ive seen better from u though.
u need more punches.but u stayed on topic so it was all good




yo im known to diss the poetic
ya so pathetic thats right i said it
if u say this verse aloud ull need a medic
like seat belts u need to stay strapped
cuz im known to lyricaly rape cats
i spit shit so fast its like an AK attack
got ppl scared when i come around like oh shit J is back
my raps r higher then Jordan so u cant hang with that
iight yall im through fuck this
everybody knows im the Poetic type and u the one I JussDiss..(JOOK$)

next topic-y is the president a dick..lol

i liked ur flow yo, the line that i liked was da jordan one...i dont like da topic i dont waste my time on the pres...n jus bcuz u dissed me, ima diss u..no hate

u say u spit shit so fast, but my diarhea rhymes run right thru u
soon the illness will take n fill u it catches thrills my rhymes kill too
u nothin but a pill to me so lemme pop u, put u in the first column
if the presidents a dick, why arent u on 'em
faggot dont ever say u my type im the one that gets Poetic
let me go like a bad habit, u's a follower but u always been unleaded
im fed up and have been read up on as if i was a writer
but i post free's n im not a biter im just a bit nicer
u should say my rhymes came out a can, n all that came out from it was cream
now im showin u what really comes outa this dream
my necklace so shiny its like i attatched highbeams

unleaded(u were never led the right way)
u aint my type(meanin u aint poetic, i am n u cant be me)

NT: how bout the next person diss me...c'mon i dare ya

i liked that.ur flow was good. u even added the president in there.lol

now im diss u juss cuz its ya NT


yo DissJuss got worse
Poetic wannabes ur not the first
u juss suck at rap and its not a curse
i got no choice but to succed
cuz i am what u bleed
ya not known around here so u need premission to procced
u juss an itch and im not gonna scratch it
u act like a bitch and my game u cant match it
i heard u was a snitch so between my legs where i stashed it..(JOOK$) easy