man that wuz some good shit
i like the flow i lost you at a couple points
more multis that would have made this piece awesome
keep writing man
leave some feedback on my OM pieces found on my sig thanx man
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man that wuz some good shit
i like the flow i lost you at a couple points
more multis that would have made this piece awesome
keep writing man
leave some feedback on my OM pieces found on my sig thanx man
easy yo nice open mic really felt it it's like u experienced it.
Thx uppin for for feed
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ur flow was pretty basic but i was feelin this piece u could use better vocabtho
feelin dis shit eazy..the structure was not that bad..some lines gave me images in my head..which was real nice..multies was cool...not bad.
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this piece was pretty simple actually...but it had emotion and it was a pretty solid but very simple piece...keep elevatin and try and spell out your words all the way....dont net abbrev.~1~
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Yo good work on diz piece. Had some emotion n some pretty good voabulary. Keep droppin em and keep elevatin. RTF on da link in my sig... it needs some votes.
Nice drop homie... flowed together well... nice topic and good wordplay
check out my battle.... and give me some feedback on my OM drop... Your verse was most deff one of the hottest peices i seen on this site
That was very basic. You got a lot to work on. One thing that would REALLY help you get the message across is spelling at one part you said you see the sun for 2 houses a day... I think you meant 2 hours a day. You also need to work on putting your lines together on 1 line you say you see niggas get raped every day then the next line your saying how your holding it for them outside... It made it sound like you were saying you were holding someones dick for them outside instead of what I think you meant as holding it down for your homies outside the pen. I think, I didn't understand it. You really need to work on your vocab and spelling first then work on your wordplay, flow, multi's and structure b/c without vocab and spelling you can't do text can you? Keep it up man
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oh yea and stop uppin this thing so damn much... you got 4 pages of replies and almost 3 pages worth of you uppin this...
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