ok man need more votes to close battle finally
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ok man need more votes to close battle finally
n some1 vote on this battle so it can be closed thnx alot
still askin for votes for this battle to be closed thnx ppl plz
resurrected from the grave, ill reintroduce you to the cemetary
cuz ill fuck up this bitch like a texan vetinary------OK NOT THAT HARD THO
slice ya spleen, rip out ya bowel and stuff it down ya throat
cuz it's the only way your shit could make any emcee around ya choke---NICE
he's a joke, but the punchline's as funny as brain cancer
your disses couldnt turn heads if you doubled up as a breakdancer---OK
my words leave you speechelss, thers no way you could still rap on
regardless of ya name, in this battle when it comes to weak emcees I'LL (Al) cap one------NOT REALLY GOOD
its a wrap son, body bag waiting for a casket
dead gansters are too late stopin not realising your past it---EHH
now IVE got the tommy gun, you just left with tommy
play with his gun, find white stuff and Al's gotta ask mommy---NO WAY!!
did puberty never hit? did i rip this bitch too young?
instead of dropping, did his balls pack up and move on?---NOT PERSONAL ENOUGH
like a limp dick slippin pets, you the weakest in do(da)minion
you either ejaculate small female grizzlies, or come with the 'bear mini mum'----EHH! OOOOO--K BAD WRDN
so rapbattles, lets keep this slaughter between you and me
I want the front seats at this motherfucker's eulogy----NICE ENDN
YOU HIT N MISS WITH ALOT OF YOUR LINES, SOME SEEMED A BIT FORCED,
NOT BAD THO, DECENT VERSE ALL AROUND, JUST WORK ON MORE
DIRECT PERSONAL PUNCHLINES, TOWARDS YOUR OPPONENT.........
WORK ON IT SOME HOMIE, YOU GOT DECENT STRUCTURE, JUST POLISH IT UP
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This mothafucka can't rap u need to cut your teeth/ (to learn something)
U can actually gain some experience from me/ -----EHH! DONT GET IT
Ull be dead by tha knife ill cut u efficiently/
Rip ur retina lose ur vision so u can't see/----COULD BE BETTER WRD'D
He doesn't rhyme yo u wastin my time/
His names forensic he fuckin solves crime/----NOT A PUNCH
So what does this mean hes po-po, 5-0, another cop/
And this means i get out my fo-fo, M-16 and u get popped/----NO GUNS ON THE (WWW)
This mothafucka talkin bout my eulogy so ur sayin im great/
But i havent died yet but death in two hours is ur fate/---NICE
This nigga will die at seven and his funeral is at eight/
Leave forensyx body dumped and noone who will locate/---OK
Like mortal kombat bitch i'll create fatalities/
But this aint a videogames son this is reality/---EHH! ADD MORE,ITS LIKE A 1/2 PUNCH
Stop rappin and go take ur criminal justice class/
What i do is tha criminal injustice so kiss my ass/---EHH! SLIM
Everybody can tell u a cop cuz u askin too many questions/
Ill change my mood from hard to harder so u can see tha inflection/----OK
THIS WAS A DECENT BATTLE OVERALL
DIFFERENT RHYME STYLES.......
BUT AL'S VERSE I THINK WAS A LITTLE BIT BETTER JUST B/C I FELT HE CAME MORE PERSONAL W/ HIS LINES......
DIDNT SEEM THAT FORCED, BUT SOME LINES, WERE PLAYED, OR RECYCLED,
TRY TO USE YOUR WORDS W/ CREATIVITY..........YOU GOT IT HOMIE
MY V/------------------AL CAPOPNE
BETTER VERSE OVERALL
BETTER DELIVERY
STRUCTURE
MORE DIRECT PERSONALS.........
V/Forensyx cuz Al capone jus didnt come hard enough.
forensyx
good start...Quote:
resurrected from the grave, ill reintroduce you to the cemetary
cuz ill fuck up this bitch like a texan vetinary
noooo..Quote:
slice ya spleen, rip out ya bowel and stuff it down ya throat
cuz it's the only way your shit could make any emcee around ya choke
not that bad...Quote:
he's a joke, but the punchline's as funny as brain cancer
your disses couldnt turn heads if you doubled up as a breakdancer
nice punch...Quote:
my words leave you speechelss, thers no way you could still rap on
regardless of ya name, in this battle when it comes to weak emcees I'LL (Al) cap one
work on ur flow...Quote:
its a wrap son, body bag waiting for a casket
dead gansters are too late stopin not realising your past it
noooo...Quote:
now IVE got the tommy gun, you just left with tommy
play with his gun, find white stuff and Al's gotta ask mommy
work on ur rhymes...Quote:
did puberty never hit? did i rip this bitch too young?
instead of dropping, did his balls pack up and move on?
nice punch...Quote:
like a limp dick slippin pets, you the weakest in do(da)minion
you either ejaculate small female grizzlies, or come with the 'bear mini mum'
horrible endin...overall6/10Quote:
so rapbattles, lets keep this slaughter between you and me
I want the front seats at this motherfucker's eulogy
VS.
Al Capone
work on the start... not that badQuote:
This mothafucka can't rap u need to cut your teeth/ (to learn something)
U can actually gain some experience from me/
nice punch...Quote:
Ull be dead by tha knife ill cut u efficiently/
Rip ur retina lose ur vision so u can't see/
good punch... nice flowQuote:
He doesn't rhyme yo u wastin my time/
His names forensic he fuckin solves crime/
great punch...Quote:
So what does this mean hes po-po, 5-0, another cop/
And this means i get out my fo-fo, M-16 and u get popped/
keep comin wit it...Quote:
This mothafucka talkin bout my eulogy so ur sayin im great/
But i havent died yet but death in two hours is ur fate/
c'mon u got this...Quote:
This nigga will die at seven and his funeral is at eight/
Leave forensyx body dumped and noone who will locate/
GAME OVER...Quote:
Like mortal kombat bitch i'll create fatalities/
But this aint a videogames son this is reality/
Stop rappin and go take ur criminal justice class/
What i do is tha criminal injustice so kiss my ass/
Everybody can tell u a cop cuz u askin too many questions/
Ill change my mood from hard to harder so u can see tha inflection/
not gunna finsh the rest cuz he beat u soo bad...forensyx
overall9/10
This battle was nice boys... but my vote goes to AlCapone because he came harder on his punches and he had better flow on it.... forensyx u not that bad but u just need to work on ur whole raps cuz u saint gunna win if u keep battlin like this one
i just feel that Al Capone came harder...so
V/ Al Capone
punches- F
Al wasn't very creative with his... Forensyx implemented better examples of wordplay and i felt that they landed better than Al's did... catagory goes to Forensyx
Rhyme scheme- F
Al didn't have any multis.... Forensyx did... neither had any internals... so this catagory got to Forensyx
Personals- F
Al was completely generic.... Rensyx played off his name a few times, and i liked that... catagory goes to Forensyx
overall vote- Forensyx
my honest opinion
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