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FormulaMC - decent peice, didn't exactly have a high point. It was very original, structure could be worked on a little bit more. Flow was a little basic, not much vocab was used with your piece.
Timeless - Nice! that was creative with the usage of names of all your members. Pretty interesting. At the end, it got a little boring, could have been worded better. but it was still a good piece.
LethalNJectionz - Decent, a few things could be fixed. The way your structure was, made everything look messed up. The way you write, is way to much.. You should do that like... at the most 3 times each verse. you do it every line. but ahwell. decent piece, not much to say.
L0st S0ul - A few bars started out good, then it came to the second line.. and it completely messed up. alot of your lines could be reworded. I've seen you do better though. But this piece was decent, not anything great.
LM - Wordplay! pretty nice, probably the most interesting verse out of everyones in this. Gotta give you props for that. MAD Wordplay, but yet maintained a good structure. Keep it up! Props
wogzta - Eh.. started off kinda choppy. Was exactly feelin it. I've also seen you do ALOT better than this. but anyways, a few of your lines were played. Especially the first bar. but no hate. i kno you have more potential.
The Judge - Sounded more like a tribute to your crew, which is pretty good. But didn't exactly go with this piece. Your last bar, i seriously did not like! but the rest was all pretty good.
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thanks alot for that man!!! thanks for takin the time to break it down!! pz!!
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My comments and ratings out of ten.
[Formula MC]-Good drop mainly self gloreification but still nicely done. good flow and good structure and most of all great attitude.you made your point load and clear that instant is gonna be around not to be fuked with 7/10
[Timeless]-Nice vocab and good flow got a bit scratchy but still hung in there nice wordplay but dunt try to force multies. good structure and nice work with useing your crew memebers names in a postive fashion 6/10
[Lethal]-good shit but i dunt like the ...............pauses there good but there just basically showing u cant think of words for the next line u can make a much betta drop by puttin in words and makin multies that way. still good drop . 7/10
[Lost]-u started off weak and slow but eventually u upped the tempo using good vocab near the end but u should of had more in the first part still nice flow and good punches.7/10
[LM]-pretty weak u didnt talk bout the crew much u more leaned to talk bout yourself and how uve improved not on how u think ya crew is besides the first few lines but should of made it longer but still aight 5/10
[Wogzta]-nice flow and good puches writers block<->blood clots works and chilli kebab punch was good working with ur name and but u didnt once use the name INSTANT in your drop would of helped and should of made it longer 6/10.
[The Judge]-nice drop i think urs was my favourite out of everyones good punches and positive personals and strong words u didnt just sling curses but u backed them up with wit. good structure and shorter pauses then lethals overall dope.9/10
overall score for the whole thread - 8.5/10 nice collab hope to see more in da future
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don't ever post anything like this ever again.
*continues throwing up*
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^^^^ wat are you talking bout this was good explain urself then.
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Good collab....some simple lines but a lot of complexity I think...some verses i think could've been structuered better but stil ;lwell writtin...long but good read keep it up guys
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word this was rreal long.... seemed just like bragging rights
LM had the best - it was ok..
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