You can be the moon and I'll be the wolf. Maybe we do a sort of fairy-tale ish approach where the moon saves the wolves life by giving it light when it's being hunted by a bear.
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You can be the moon and I'll be the wolf. Maybe we do a sort of fairy-tale ish approach where the moon saves the wolves life by giving it light when it's being hunted by a bear.
i dig it. hey bro i sent you a message
I can't send Private Messages yet. Alright, since you're the moon I'll give you a four line narrative so that you can get your first verse in. Let's stick with ten line stanzas for the wolf and moon and I'll add four line bridges in between.
ok sounds great. lets make this a good one :)
Once upon a time, lonely in the sky was a man on the moon,
with eternal life, but no one aside from him standing in gloom.
He watched over the Earth to keep the shadows compelled,
when one day he seen a creature in need of miraculous help.
@Sammy
They call me Lunar Tick. Every move and steps are movie scripts.
in that blue abyss was a movement. twitch. the mood was shift.
a lumbering hue exists in gloomy mist. truly sensing doom impending,
he moved against a huge crevice. woods and sticks, seperates this wolf from its hugest threat
That's looking good so far.
It's amazing how something so small instantly changes your whole world. Bro, I'm honestly glad for you.. you must be gettin proud af too on the small things.. like my boy just sat up the other day and I was like "NFL STAR RIGHT THERE, NFL SOON BABY, WHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!" cheering him on haahahahha
Lol.....yeah but the baby mama isn't so fun at times.
So how do you deal with that, masturbate?
@Hypotheses congrats bud
Nope. Celibacy
@Jukon
Collab? Probably just twelve.
For OM feedback as a suggestion not required, but should use categories to help sense where some writers lack in or what needs to be improved therefore.
Flow:
Multiples:
Wordplay:
Theme:
Originality:
Imagery:
Nothing to major just the basis. Almost like critiquing a topical battle, but with help to improve. Just a suggestion. I might still use it though. Then finalize with your overall analysis.
Not a bad thought, Hypo. I have always done this in my word as it is without the clear differentiation between the topics.
yo fresh, wassup
hey Emily, been a while...
It's sad to watch your OM fall to the 2nd page.
whos OM?
Anyone who drops an OM. Watching it drop into the deep abyss that is OM page 2.
Many things go in... None come out.
lovin the verbal combats goin on. salute.
Anyone wanting to collab?
what you got in mind topic wise?
I wanted to do the next entry for my Bernice In Wonderland thing... idk if you read the first one, but it ends with the mad hatter coming into play. It's more-so a narrative piece than a regular topical, you know? I'd pretty much just need you being the mad hatter. The way I'm writing these are like alices madness returns, morbid/gorey, etc..
well get a few bars done and msg me it, so I can get a feel for it
This Open Mic section is underrated. There's a lot of nice work here.
@Easy. wanna discuss it here or pm bruh?