Uppin one last time for feedback
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Uppin one last time for feedback
The flow was well done, and it got carried by some nice syllable work here and there - although sometimes it jogged, it was pretty much perfect all the way through
the style of your writing isn't as unique as it should be if you want a lot of attention from readers - you need to find a way to write that hasn't been done a lot, wording and such
but i liked this.. nice piece
Thanx for the feedback.