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I was being sarcastik dawg... But let me be a bit more constructive in my critisicm...
Up side to the drop, it seemed really deep, and thats good skill to be able to put how you feel in words, cause i cant do that 4 shit...
So i was feelin' that in your verse.
Your flow was a bit off but it was alright, just needs to be set out a bit better... But it was alright flow...
Structure was alright but needed to be done a bit better, the song had a deep meaning, bu it was behind every line, some of the lines i felt i had already heard and unoriginal, but thats how it is when your new to the site. Also it seemed a bit re-pedative, always sayin i luv your my family, made it sound a bit queer for tha net...
So just throw in mroe multis, come up with more original lines, fix structure and flow a bit more, and you'll be writing ill open mcis with more practice. Cause it all comes together over time....
Ight dawg...
pce
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That was basic but you were reppin' and I love that. The flow was nice. I would recommend adding wordplay, metas and multies. But stay active and keep dropping and you'll elevate fam sho nuff. One+
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WHAT THE FUCK?....that wasnt tight...! it really fuckin sucked..
half of it didnt rhyme...i dont even write open mics...and i could FREESTYLE a better drop...seriously KOT what are you doing? whatever im not even in omens anymore...for that reason...we lost talent and got...well...this shit!
peace
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^^ oh thanks.... i really appreciate that shit and thats exactly what it is SHIT, yes i do need to elevate but thats not the kind of critisism i want i want critisism to help me... so thanks for the post dawg.
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my man yog_dogg...that was such an ill name....now, ur AFI_KILLS_RAP...what a major downgrade...
but this shit was wack...
structure sucked anus....flow was the wackest i have ever seen....
u tried to rep the omens, but this was disgraceful...
but it doesnt matter....mondo thugs r better....
M-UNIT FOR LIFE!
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I liked it,with alitle bit of elevation you could become big on here
