200 lines (yes 100 bars/200 lines)

Like cry and legendz stated already...very entertaining the whole way throughout,your vocab is very stong and your schemes are super sollid,this was actually a refreshing read especially considering how long it was.Kept me entertained throughout,and the mystical/ancient and astrological references where all hella sick..some of the metas in there were very well put and I don't know if alot of people where picking up on them but I def noticed..good shit man and keep writing,This actually makes me feal like doing some work,and if you ever wanna collab get at me<

so yeah lmfao, nice work glos. but you already knew that. love the scatter brain and different crazy directions it went in, some of the best lines ever are in pieces like this. cant lie -i only read about half of it. but yeah.. loved it -a lot of was just ok with dope rhyming. but there were some really sick lines in there to man. and i agree with cry -thats how its meant to be done. bravo. brave to post something this long though.. im tempted to drop the high school dropout on here now lmfao. one

high school dropout?

JEEZUS FUCKIN CHRIST...wow...that was so awesome...i mean i cant even quote....i loved every fuckin line...so many metaphors that were done so perfect...u hit so many concepts too...i am just so amazed at what u wrote...i must say i never read any of ur other shit but i am sure as hell glad i read this...it was so well written...n all honesty i am jealous of ur talents n tha fact that CRY n LEGENDS are giving u props...but they are well deserved...i think this mayb one of tha best things i have ever had tha pleasure of reading on RB...it was so far above my own skill that i had to just sit back n take it all in...u make me wanna try harder n harder to OUT DO u now...it was so fucking great ...i will NOM this piece for HOF...i cant wait to hear tha audio for this...do BIG PROPS TO YA...keep on writing that fuckin awesome shit n stay up on what u do bruh!!!

Pretty consistent bars, only thing it lacked was some real dope wordplay.. kinda shit that makes this abit more than just a good rhymescheme. But with the short lines I didn't expect it, you were real focused on the schemes, which isn't a bad thing.. didn't read it all but what I did was on point and well worded.

yo.. I will return a bunch of feeds tommarow.. haven't had much time to.. sorry bout that guys.. thanks for the positive feed back

yo, the whole thing was nice....when I thought it might slow down......the niceness came back..like your style..flowed correct..witty shit in there...alot I could quote..didn't see fillers...overall you came with heat..nothing else to say...I'm mad tired, but I read it, so........

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this was raw man...you put some work into this and it should be rewarded IMHO...inspiring man,as usual.

Well baza. 'Glo. I read the whole thing.
And lately I haven't contributed at all to rb.
And that's because I don't know were I want my passion to go.
I'm in class as of now. So I can't sit and drop the best feed.
I will when I get home.
Glo you ripped this up, One of your best pieces by far, I really enjoyed this piece for some reason. Entertained me, And you covered a lot. 100 bars and runnin!

im not gonna lie to you i didnt read the whole thing its to early to read this much but i will say the intro was good the first 10 bars i read and was sick, creativeness was good and all.. ur flow is what made it intresting to read...
the person who wrote this is a fucking beast thats all i gotta say...

much props

Read the whole thing again. Really good shit man.

ok, usually I like to give a line by line breakdown but I just don't have 3 hours to spare critiquing your piece. Not that it doesn't deserve it at all. I will tell the truth and say I read the WHOLE piece and thought it was very consistent I like the quick hitter lines I think they are far more suited to audio, and there is almost no clutter used at all here. I've also read all the other feedback you've received and noticed you got some noms for piece of the month for january with this joint, which is actually what pulled my coat to it. Sometimes dudes nom stuff that I'm not always feeling but this was real butter. If I was to truly critique you there were a few spots where I thought you could of reworded things for it to be just that much nicer. (If you care for me to tell you what those are, PM me, I'll be glad to take the time out to chat with you about it) Really quality stuff though, a lot of work put into this. This is on par with some of the other top writers on the board here, and definitely deserves all the great feed and nominations it's getting. Keep doin' what you do.

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honestly, it was pretty good. you get more kudos for the length itself from me - 200 lines is definitely a feat. especially one that can keep people in tuned for the entirety of the verse. honestly, i didn't feel it was the most consistent at points - it had a wave of simplistic, flowing lines that i felt were just taking up space - but they rhymed, and it was 200 lines, so who am i to say shit?

on the other hand, there were sections that were obviously sick, and that showcased your abilities as a truly talented lyricist.

Quote:

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sea full of snakes, deceitful with hate
walls are closen' in you won't even escape
I need to relate and express my mind
I'm not good with words I do it best with rhymes
write complex wit lines, hear with some caution
every line that I flow is a spear I am tossin'

fire out the staff, a sire with a wrath
evil spirits ger released when I write a paragraph
ghastly banshees an fucken' poltergeists
create a super nova an fucken' explode with light

I listen to Wu, Nas and also Rakim
the great fucken' classics, soon to be forgotten (so sad but possibly true)

continue to hate, you're life 'll be wack
people smile at ya face put a knife in ya back
just try to relax, I speak to the viewer
the state of rap now is deep in the sewer
time to emerge, and rise from the ashes
death is a bitch, and life is a bastard

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these among some other sections shined as gems in large pile of rubble you built here - not to say its all rubble, but you get the picture. i will come back, re read and possibly add more quotables on to that list cuz i dont feel these few completely do the verse justice. so, sorry for right now gawd.

it was apparent you put a lot of effort into this, and also apparent you were determined to reach your goal of 100 bars. the question is, were you more focused on reaching that linear goal or crafting quality and substance every step of the way? i think at times your focused wavered from one to the other, which was the only slightly downfall of the verse. but come on, it's still pretty damn impressive.

i'm no gonna nominate simply cuz i havent been here long enough to feel i can accurately make that judgement. standards and etc.

but this was tight shit iglos .. i remember reading your alcoholic verse over on RE and was impressed then, and have been peepin your shit ever since. you got juice fam .. dont stop writing, for everyone's sake keep the art form alive,

keep doin it,

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whats your name at RE?.. thx for the props

blacketh..