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good stuff my friend. alotta strong imagery in here. the content progresses in a logical string of events by is tied down by a simplified message. overall it is insightful. not much bad can be said about this piece. i like most narratives, and whats better than one thats in a class of its own. good job.
hit my piece up in return please. thanks.
peACE
Very nice story line my friend....Had good imagery man...I could actually picture these two people meeting and discussing the conversation........I like the way you ended it aswell
this was a pretty dope piece...
Keep it up!!!
Nice drop.
Alot of emotion in this piece as well as alot of recent events , talking about the oil and war, sinners being able to be by god etc.. they flow was good as well very easy to read i didnt break stride once. Imagery well what can i say it was alos great I felt it from every line, I would dare to say you are speaking like the voice of experince in this matter for how you put it down was perfect, very witty as well you used alot of your material.
I like the story line as well, multiple conversation with more then one plot, I liked the political outlook as well, very creative. Wording was a little here and there I did see some slang and cursing but hey thats justr shows you do your own thing rather to sticking to the guidelines, that I respect more then anything. Your Opener with timothy 6:10 was very good and it gave me that heart to heart feeling as soon as I strated to read it. The moral at the end was the icing on the cake really not only did your verse capture my attention it also made me think of the life I live to this day, I take alot of things for granted and sadly to say im all about the money and any oppertunity I get to make it I do it w/o thinking of the entire picture and the possibility of the consequences.
good piece fam!
9/10