word thanks for the feed fam...
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word thanks for the feed fam...
vocab and structure was str8... consistant... good shit man... feelin it...
This was nice. Wordplay wasn't spectacular, but this was still dope. I was really feeling the ABAB structure of this piece. Hmm...structure was alright, like I said, wordplay could improve, and your structure was good. Keep dropping.
Overall this was a good piece..not nearly your best work...hmm...I liked the imagery side of it but a lot of it was spotty as far as the flow goes...I liked the fact that you tried different rhyme schemes...it was a good look from you..but made this seem more like a poetic drop with such styles considering the choppyness of the flow..but all in all this was a good read...nothing more...keep it up..and RTF....
ha u got banned dwag. i beem banned a few times.ha
poetic approach you took on this piece.
nicee imagery effects and word soundings here for real as well...'''some lines seemed a bit rushed and somewhat misleading
like this line-
they'll spend their evenings with black cats aged barn
aged barn?
perhaps its meant to carry over to the line , but it doesnt aooear so to Me.so?
but w/e all in all a nicee piece i like the way it ended as well
cool poetry
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