Thunderclouds

Yea, this was cool. Flow was good the entire way through, but I agree with everyone else...some parts did seem a bit forced in order to maintain the consistent rhyme scheme. The content of the story progressed fairly well and you maintained my interest throughout. I've never recalled reading anything by you, but you have serious potential. Your style reminds me of Evolve. When the SS opens back up, try to get in it. Anyway, despite some grammatical errors (spelling especially...conversate is not a word), I liked this piece. Good stuff man.

-Nique.