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Nice peice Feebz buts wheres the links.
The wordplay was nice and the flow was smotoh and constant. The Emotion was very well done. The Imagenation was iight and the Crativty was nice as well. I felt this was one of your weaker peices but that just my Opinion. I Think that you should have spent more time and put more mind into this peice man. Other then that is was decent. Deffinantly not your best. RTF with one of the links in my sig. Thankyou.
~Bell.
There are no links because I didn't reply to anything, other than Envigale's piece. But my reply on his piece was more of a drive-by reply, shit wasn't detailed cuz I was tired as fuck. yeah
i thought this was actually well written and the storyline was laid down nicely, the wording at first was like ewwww no but after the 2nd line you picked it up quite nicely, the vocab was good not to dimple, the flow i thought was very nice, the emotion was decent and you have a fluid imagery indeed as said before, i liked this peace feeble for you being a text head, you sure do topical pretty decently....lets see you do poetry next eh?
"I had to watch him go through this, I was torn from my shell
Age 13, knew when he was smoking, warned from the smell"
nyce i really liked this part^^^^
Wow this piece was really nice. I love the way you do your multi syllable rhyming. The flow was kinda choppy but what do you really expect with text. Everything always sounds off. Anyways dope piece man i really enjoyed it.